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TheArticPegasus


Gradually Improving

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So in this chapter, It is flurry's first day back to school after the winter break. But, flurry is not all that excited. This is due to the bullying she gets at school. Being an alicorn would be a lot easier... if she wasn't always thought of as an overpowered monster. This is not good, fact being she now controls the crystal heart. If she is happy, the heart shines with love! If she is sad or angry, the effects can be devastating.

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A wonderful beginning to a story, can't wait to see where this is going!:raritywink:

7568697 I have to disagree. The concept is great, but the story so far feels overall rushed. The teacher's reaction I personally have a hard time believing to be legit. Maybe with some more backstory.

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Actually, I was trying to imply that her outbreaks have been a reoccurring event. The teachers are beginning to loose their temper with Flurry Heart. Thank you for the advice though :twilightsmile:

7568865 Ah, alrighty then. Seriously though, mind your pacing. It's what destroyed most of my earlier stories.

Update:
Ok, so Iv'e been trying to improve my writing skills and I'm probably going to try re-writing it. x3 lol It was pretty rushed. I think I got to excited with the idea and wanted to put all my ideas into one piece of text. No exact date as to when the new one will be written, but hopefully soon. ^^

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