• Member Since 22nd May, 2012
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David Hasselhoof


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Phil Gumshoe has a pretty laid back life, holding the steady job as Ponyville's only private investigator while researching and practicing magic and arcane lore. However, when two ponies are killed in what only seems to be an accident, he finds that he's bitten off far more than he can chew, as both the investigator of a murder committed by a powerful entity and the only hope of two fillies whose lives have been changed forever.

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I would give you the "Dis gon b GUD" gif but it's overused and I'm too lazy to find it. Don't know why there hasn't been any activity on this - it sounds freakin awesome to me!!

First, I love your OC. The name's a little odd, but you've got the sleuthy detective tone down so well that I don't even care.

Second, I didn't see one single typo, grammatical mistake, or shoddy wording. Either you have excellent proofreaders, or you're a precise sonofabitch.

And most importantly, the story and plot really intrigue me. If you've got the storywriting skills to develop a good mystery, this i feel like this has the potential one of my top adventure fics on the site.

I have to ask though, is this an alternate universe? Why is Big Mac scrawny? Or is it just set quite a few years before the current show?

Bottom line: get writing, pal.

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