Twilight's day off

Twilight gets a day off and travels around ponyville and does various errands she has been meaning to do

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Eonflare

Eonflare #1 · Jul 10th, 2016 · · ·

Do you want criticism then? Some people think it's mean.

21latenighter

21latenighter #2 · Jul 10th, 2016 · · ·

7378868 Not that, I do like to receive comments if people find something out of whack, but I like them to at least have a little respect about it, had a few really nasty ones on a couple stories. I also like feedback when I write a story with a style that I am not familiar with like this one. So I guess I do like criticism to a point, as long as it is about how I could of wrote the story better and not just saying that my story sucks and I should stop writing all together.

Eonflare

Eonflare #3 · Jul 10th, 2016 · 1 · ·

7379672 Then for one, you need to improve your grammar. For example, I saw so many questions in the writing, but only saw one question mark. That can really off-putting, and disconnect the reader.

Also, I think you should read through it, aloud, to yourself before you consider it finished. If something doesn't sound right, you should note it.

21latenighter

21latenighter #4 · Jul 10th, 2016 · · ·

7379775 Thank you for your input and being nice, I didn't notice some of that when I read through it, And I do read through my stories aloud, but I know I can miss things and I keep hearing that I need to get an editor, but I don't know how to find one. It does help me getting comments like yours though, so thank you and I will look into it and add this advice to my writing.