My name is Doctor Alex Jensen. I was recruited by A.E.G.I.S as part of a top secret project, codenamed 'PANDORA'. Then, on May 13th, 2012, something went terribly wrong. I am Doctor Alex Jensen, and tonight will be the longest night of my life.
Applejack is back to normal and one of the greatest threats in Equestria's history has finally been laid to rest. But if that's the case, then what's going on with Apple Bloom?
Marble enjoys sculpting rocks, but her father doesn't see that as a lucrative or useful way to live one's life. He thinks she needs to get married. Marble doesn't want to, and will go to great lengths to ensure she won't have to.
Pinkie Pie wakes up in her room to find that her room has been sealed shut by magic. Twilight and her friends are outside her door, telling her that everything will be fine.
Page-Turner, a successful unicorn writer, has her near-content life flipped upside-down after a strange being attacks her one night. Finding herself transformed into a wretched creature with a hunger for blood, she struggles to adapt and survive.
Scootaloo thought that it would all be over. She thought that there wasn't anything to be afraid about anymore. But what Scootaloo doesn't realize is that there's something else that is lurking in the darkness of the forests...
I do like the general atmosphere you created in your little pilot here. There were a few spelling errors in a couple of spots, and at the beginning you did have a little but of a run-on, however, overall I am pleased to say that your story has piqued my interest. Do continue this story, Or at least have a whole new story dedicated to this whole Schism. You've got quite a bit to work with here, and I believe in you to make a great little tale. Emperor guide you.
7285773 Howdy good sir and or madam, I'm glad you enjoyed my story. I'm still honestly shocked that people enjoyed it. Would you mind if I ask where the spelling errors would be, and maybe the run-on sentence? I'd like to fix the issues before continuing my work on the second chapter. As for expanding upon the Schism? Though I could theoretically expand upon it, there are definitely people who could do it better or have done it better. Besides, the Schism is a big part of Equestria Divided and if you're truly interested in it, you could find more information at this group: https://www.fimfiction.net/group/197422/equestria-divided There you can find a link to the Canon of that universe, and in the forums people discussing it in depth and filling holes. I'm sure they could explain it better. Thank you for taking the time to read my story.
I love it!
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I do like the general atmosphere you created in your little pilot here. There were a few spelling errors in a couple of spots, and at the beginning you did have a little but of a run-on, however, overall I am pleased to say that your story has piqued my interest. Do continue this story, Or at least have a whole new story dedicated to this whole Schism. You've got quite a bit to work with here, and I believe in you to make a great little tale.
Emperor guide you.
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Knight of the Moustache
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An Equestria Divided story?!
Bueno...
7285773 Howdy good sir and or madam, I'm glad you enjoyed my story. I'm still honestly shocked that people enjoyed it. Would you mind if I ask where the spelling errors would be, and maybe the run-on sentence? I'd like to fix the issues before continuing my work on the second chapter. As for expanding upon the Schism? Though I could theoretically expand upon it, there are definitely people who could do it better or have done it better. Besides, the Schism is a big part of Equestria Divided and if you're truly interested in it, you could find more information at this group: https://www.fimfiction.net/group/197422/equestria-divided
There you can find a link to the Canon of that universe, and in the forums people discussing it in depth and filling holes. I'm sure they could explain it better. Thank you for taking the time to read my story.
Better then mine