I'm not the best writer on the planet, so criticism is much appreciated.
I never had what you could call a good childhood. My parents hate me, I feel like more of a burden then a blessing. I have never been to a real school, so I have no idea how to read or write. I can barley lift something half my weight. Seems like life itself didn't want mine to start at all. So I've decided I'm running away, I don't care where I end up. Even if it's a world populated by pastel colored ponies.
Marked Teen for some strong language.
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Hi, I've read this chapter and wanted to point out a few things. You should explain things a bit more not like, he got smacked, he got up and walked away. It should be more explained - When he got smacked to the face (ouch) he fell to the floor, after a few seconds he got up and headed towards (that place). Something like that.
All in all the story so far is great and I would like to see more chapters in the future!
Can't wait to see more.
Can't wait for more of this.
7136967 Glad you want to see more! It's very encouraging. I had a long period of intense school work. But I'll have more time to write this story now. So expect at least one chapter a week!
7138023 Glad to see this is continued. This is somewhat a funny story, and full of adventure at times.
Hope to see more.
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If you spend all this time and energy on crying (
) of course you'd have trouble lifting barley.