As my username says, I am a romance writer. I do fan fics with only OCs as that is easier for me. My favourite books are romance, mostly ones set in the medieval era. I write them too.
Two families and two pairs of twin foals are separated by a stone wall of hatred. One day, the foals manage to get outside the castle walls, then bump into each other in a forest and become fast friends. Will their families ever make peace in the end or will the stone wall of hatred still stand? This is based off Lion King 2.
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Good story. If I was going to write it I would have put in more detail and extended the last chapter over two or even three. Overall, though, a nice adaptation.
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You seem to be the first person to be positive with me. At the time, I had to go to bed and I rushed to finish it which is the type of writer I can be like and I try not to rush but I'm a person who loves to finish quickly and not want to do it the next day because of school and such.
It's also because I didn't enjoy this fan fic as much as the other ones.
Why just list off the characters and chapters? This is the perfect situation for show dont tell. Dont just list off all the chapters plot points and list off characters and a bunch of their traits. Show us all this in the actual story.
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DisneyFanatic2364 also did the same with one of her fan fics. It's the way I write descriptions on this website so don't criticise or question it.
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Criticism helps build a better writer. No one is born knowing how to write, you learn. Thats why there are so many writers on this site infamous for throwing out bad stories with no improvement. Throwing away criticism or not learning from it results in little improvement if at all.
Show dont Tell isnt my own creation, many critics use it to point out a flaw in a story where the writer lists off character attributes, settings, etc. A story feels much more natural when you learn everything for yourself as a reader. If another writer on this site does the same they too suffer from the same problem.
I just hope that she updates The Lavender Arrow.