Earth is now in an age where Ponies have become common-place ever since they fell from the sky. A majority of humans live in harmony with them, but some aren't as accepting. Others have actually been teamed up with Ponies to fight the forces of darkness that looms over the world, and this led to the creation of the Infused.
One of those Infused is a young man that goes by the name of Dusklight Shadow.
With his partner, an Alicorn named Twilight Sparkle, and his friends; they travel across the world to fight spawns of darkness known as the Corrupted, hunt monsters, and keep the evil bigshots from ruling the world with an iron fist... hoof... whatever it is you want to call it.
Join this team of Infused, and Ponies, as they journey the globe to protect it from evil, or get themselves killed in the process.
Disclaimer: All characters, music, and anything else that is not of my own creation belong to their respective owners.
Dusklight seems to have a short temper. On the other hoof, Mr. Generic loser deserved it.
I do note... for a human... Dusklight has a very pony-like name. -Gasp!- It's a conspiracy I tellz you! A conspiracy! -shot-
Hmmmm... I notice that the story said ponies and other creatures are appearing. Perhaps villainous characters will appear as well? Dun dun dunnnnnn! (Discord!) Gasp!
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Oh, don't worry. Things are gonna get interesting later on.
Your OCs come off as being, well, unlikable and bland. I recommend reading some terrible HiE fics to learn what to avoid.
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Well, the main protagonists are based off of myself and three of my friends, and I try to portray my personality and their's as best as I can. Due to the fact that I don't have a proofreader(and doing self-editing), I can't actually guarantee most things to be up to snuff. So I do apologize, but with me being fairly new to the fanfic business I still have a lot to learn. I have the whole story in my head, but the execution, I admit, is a bit choppy. I will say, however, that character development will come later on, things will be explained, and quality will, hopefully, get better. This is mainly something that I do to improve my writing skills and as a hobby, but if there are things that I could improve do not hesitate to tell me. If you read my first fic Shadows of the Moonlight, then you will understand what I mean. Not my best work. I do plan to actually go further with this story and leave SotM on the back burner for a possible rewrite. I do appreciate the criticism though. Again, I'm fairly new to this, and don't necessarily have anything to go by in terms of quality besides myself. So thank you for providing the criticism that I need.
Ha haaaaaaa! That was great! I was thinking he was getting the hang of magic WAY too fast. Then the fatigue hit him. So that made sense. When Dusk hit the Kamehameha... I was grinning like a mad pony! I'm a little surprised though. During the training, he took a natural pony stance when concentrating, but not when he was in the duel. I'd have loved to see twilight's reaction to that! Great work, keep it up. : D
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I will say that Dusk will only use the horse stance when charging a powerful attack (ex: Dark Ragnarok and the Kamehameha/Arcane Wave), or whenever he's training and experimenting with different spells. If he's in a fight, he will use the other stance if he's unarmed.
Thanks for the feedback! I always appreciate to see what people think when I write these.
On another note: I just want to say that Pink Flash is going to make an appearance in later chapters. I don't know for sure when that is, but I am planning on it. As I said in one if my blog posts; I have the beginning and end, but the middle portions I'm still working on. I kind of just make it up as I go along... heheh *awkwardly shifts eyes to the left*.