Since christmas or should i say hearths warming eve is coming i decided to make a short little story about the joy of this time of the year.
Since christmas or should i say hearths warming eve is coming i decided to make a short little story about the joy of this time of the year.
Hello, I came here just out of pure curiosity. I must say, this story has surely nice intentions behind it. And I'd say it would be even able to carry out the warm and friendly atmosphere of Hearth's Warming, if it wasn't for a few issues.
Main issue - missing spaces.
Which one is easier to read? The latter? That's because of the space that folloes after comma (,) or full stop (.) Is that clear?
Second, there was not much of direct speech, but still;
It should be:
direct speech is normal, stand-alone sentence. There is no need for commas or full stops after it.
Third, too long sentences.
Again, compare with this:
I just split them a little. This helps the reader to not to get confused or lost.
If anything wasn't clear, don't be afraid to ask.
Good luck with upcoming stories!
-Ever
Thanks for pointing this out.This was an early writing and well,i didn't quite had a good grasp on the proper structure of the text and well my punctuation could use a little more work.
I do try to fix this little problems i have.
Also,thank you for reading and sharing your opinion on this,my work barely gets any attention.
7731317 You're welcome.
Well, wouldn't promoting and adding the story to some groups help?