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Absolutely Disgusting12,204 stories ·605 members

We are better!!!!!!!!!

Their team(The Cutie Marks Crusaders) competes a boy team (The Stars) and they are going to fight for the first place!Who is going to win?And what would become at School Dance Valentine's day?

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The bet · 12th Oct 2015 · 651 words
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Friends...secretly · 12th Oct 2015 · 324 words
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The Happy End · 12th Oct 2015 · 811 words
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Shamrock95

Shamrock95 #1 · Oct 12th, 2015 · 2 · · The Happy End ·

Wow. I mean, there's subpar English, and then there's... this.

Is it safe to assume that English isn't your first language? Because there are errors in just about every paragraph. The whole thing is just a mess of missing punctuation, spelling mistakes, homophone errors, and twisted grammar. I would recommend that you invest in a good editor, but I honestly don't know how much they'd be able to salvage something like this.

My advice? Take some time to learn the basic mechanics of the English language before you try writing again.

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