You know about Equestria. You know about the series. You know about the characters. And surely you know the story of how it all started? No? Well, it wasn't always like this. There was not always the Kingdom named Equestria, Celestia had not always the look she have today. And also the other characters were once different. Probably you already knew a thing or two.
There are many stories about it and it's up to you, what do you think. This story can either be a fictitious story for you, or the one and only real story about Celestia's past. That time when Celestia wasn’t a princess, that time she was only known as "The last unicorn".
Chapters (6)
One of the greatest book and movie combined with My Little Pony is very interesting indeed. I can't wait to read more.
Ah the Tree of Harmony. I definitely like where this is going.
And so Everfree Forest and The Castle of the Two Sisters are born.
So Mabruk becomes Discord. Very interesting indeed.
Very interesting indeed.
What a way to come full circle.
6465241 Well, it had to happen much...^^
6465211 Thank you!
6464059 Somehow it fits together perfectly, don't you think? :-)
6464028 yep
6463991 The tree is just the beginning...^^
6463956 I hope you will like it. Have fun!^^
I've read a chapter or two, and it has some of the...pleasant eerie sensation of the book/cartoon, but unfortunately the prose needs a significant editing pass to really shine. Many sentences feel stilted/unnatural.
As a quicl example, from the start of the final chapter :
It would read much better as 'Since that day, much has happened.', and that could evolve to something like 'Since that long-ago era, much has changed.'
Anyhow! Keep at it
6486695 Hi, Morning Sun. Thanks for your review and I appreciate your suggestions for improvement. Unfortunately, I have to say that I could write German much better than English. That's why I have to work with different translators and that limits my creativity in writing. For me it is just important that you understand the story.^^
Anyway thanks for your advice and for reading my story. ;-)
I can picture luna in the style of the last unicorn its really intresting so far
6775543 Thank you. I hope you'll enjoy the rest of the story.
epilogue of the movie