I can take or leave the clop aspects of the story, not really into that sort of thing, for all that I'm pretty open minded about it. What has me absolutely flabbergasted is the SOCIETAL work this author has done on the story. It makes so much goddamn sense I'm amazed I never thought of it before. Considering how equine herd psychology combined with a sapience and the disparity of male to female ratios... I am absolutely amazed at this story.
Hats off to the author. This is world building at its finest.
To be fair the show in season 2 has adjusted the ratio of females to males from 5:1 to 3:1, kinda like how the state of Georgia has that ratio for it's population.
As for the fic itself I do like how you build your universe, regardless whether people agree or not. You tackle the whole gender roles reversal thing very well. *Note: now I'm picturing a male version of the Women's Suffrage Movement in Equestria. Spike is lucky because he won't have to worry about sexism because of the whole "I breath fire and can swim in lava" thing...but I digress. There are parts of this fic that separate it from being just a straight forward clop, yes there is quit a lot of that in this fic; however, this fic is also well written, the characters are likeable and there some genuine hard warming moments sprinkled here and there. There are two things that makes this work. The first is that unlike a lot of HIE this takes place from the pony's perspective(Dash) and the second is that Lero is somewhat relatable and has to learn the social norms of his new world.
I'm not so much interested in the clop part (although it is rather arousing) rather than the actual story line. Don't know 'bout y'all but the part of them actually falling in love is the best part of this fic, this is easily the best clopfic I have read yet and can't wait for chapter 7.
640471 I share thy opinions, but my gosh I never even contemplated this kind of level of detail when I went into making other races for my world, heck, this didn't even hit my radar!
I really wasn't expecting anything this romantic from a story with such an abrupt beginning, especially a clopfic. This story is gonna be one of my faves for a looooong time.
Phew... I've been absolutely loving this story - for the clop as well, but especially for the amazing world-building - my brain's probably going to start leaking out the holes from all the head-canoning I've been doing.
I've probably laughed harder so far than at anything else in ages. This really does have everything, kudos to you, AnonPony!
Then, what do you know, I click on the next button, waiting for my gloriously ongoing fix of Dashie goodness, and what do I find but my old nemesis Error 502. It is testament to your writing, good sir/madam, that I frantically tried again and again until I got through to this chapter.
Am enjoying so much, so must get back to reading before withdrawal.
Just wanted to say, in the future when I am trying to write a harem story I will keep this type of societal background in mind, as it seems to set the tone and pacing of the story quite nicely as well as provide tasty background information, which as someone who played skyrim and obtained a copy of every book in the game, means alot to me. Thanks for this story!
Either they have some other reason for falling out (like, the wind-related magic gets disrupted overtime and they no longer provide top flying ability) or its an evolutionary anachronism - most probably the feathers weren't always super-durable and needed to be replaced. When pegasi evolved into magical beings they are now, the shedding was no longer needed but the mechanism for growing new feathers was still there - so a pegasi who did not shed would develop a serious health condition from feathers growing through one another.
Anyone else now want to read about a knight questing to rescue her stallion from an evil mare or a dragon or something?
Wait, knights of yore were all female and males are a once-oppressed minority... that means Celestia follows a strict affirmative action policy when hiring her guards.
"Kidnapping stallions." LOL. Celestia must be progressive with all the Royal Guard stallions then. I do find that bit conflicting slightly with current headcanon, perhaps something in the next chapters will clear it up. This continues to excel beyond anything I fathomed possible.
Wow I have to say I love the idea of this tradition. The earth pony one with a flowers is kinda neat too. I hope you don't mind if I reference this in a story if I ever get around to writing it.
Do you think unicorns just copy the flower thing or would they do their own thing with gems or something?
Some attached mystical significance to the shed feathers, thinking of them as tiny pieces of their own souls, keeping the cast-off feathers safe so they could be burned at their owner’s funeral.
Even those that didn't attach mystical significance to the feathers would still keep them safe and burn them out of tradition. Also since their personal significance would be so great to anyone that was given a feather, the recipient would keep the feather treasured and keep it to be burnt at their own funeral.
I very much share your shame, my friend. But I'm taking this fic as inspiration. It's teaching me how to write a proper damn romance, and even proper clop by extension!
640471 I completely agree with your statement! I've read a lot of fanfics, but this definitely has some of the most detailed explanation/description of pony society.
2470519 I was thinking the same thing at first, but that just doesn't make sense. I'd assume they didn't decay with time alone, hence why those in the cave were more or less in tact. If left to the elements, they'd probably be damaged over time by either animal or nature, and thus break down eventually. Though not nearly as fast as flesh, even normal feathers take a while to go.
This chapter is a little weak imo. The whole feather thing means less because to a human who did not grow up in Equestria, it means very little to keep that feather, yeah he is doing it out of love but the statement would have been stronger had he had some kind of preconceptions IE it's old timey and embarrassing, but I love rd enough to do it anyways exc. But love the story anyways even if I groaned a bit at this chapter.
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The author is currently working on chapter 7, a chapter involving Twilight (though I don't know more specifics than that).
I can take or leave the clop aspects of the story, not really into that sort of thing, for all that I'm pretty open minded about it. What has me absolutely flabbergasted is the SOCIETAL work this author has done on the story. It makes so much goddamn sense I'm amazed I never thought of it before. Considering how equine herd psychology combined with a sapience and the disparity of male to female ratios... I am absolutely amazed at this story.
Hats off to the author. This is world building at its finest.
Thank you very much for writing it.
To be fair the show in season 2 has adjusted the ratio of females to males from 5:1 to 3:1, kinda like how the state of Georgia has that ratio for it's population.
As for the fic itself I do like how you build your universe, regardless whether people agree or not. You tackle the whole gender roles reversal thing very well. *Note: now I'm picturing a male version of the Women's Suffrage Movement in Equestria. Spike is lucky because he won't have to worry about sexism because of the whole "I breath fire and can swim in lava" thing...but I digress. There are parts of this fic that separate it from being just a straight forward clop, yes there is quit a lot of that in this fic; however, this fic is also well written, the characters are likeable and there some genuine hard warming moments sprinkled here and there. There are two things that makes this work. The first is that unlike a lot of HIE this takes place from the pony's perspective(Dash) and the second is that Lero is somewhat relatable and has to learn the social norms of his new world.
I like this story alot the traditions thin is interesting and this is the first story I've seen like it.
I'm not so much interested in the clop part (although it is rather arousing) rather than the actual story line. Don't know 'bout y'all but the part of them actually falling in love is the best part of this fic, this is easily the best clopfic I have read yet and can't wait for chapter 7.
640471 I share thy opinions, but my gosh I never even contemplated this kind of level of detail when I went into making other races for my world, heck, this didn't even hit my radar!
I am ashamed.
wow, fuck the sex, this is great
The awesome sauce continues to flow
728471 Heheheeheh... "Fuck the sex" LMFAO!
You really put a lot of thought into this story. And it shows. Awesome read.
I really wasn't expecting anything this romantic from a story with such an abrupt beginning, especially a clopfic. This story is gonna be one of my faves for a looooong time.
MOAR
Oh wait, there is more...
This romance.... it's too much for me... it makes me angry... but it's still real cute.
640471 I also share the opinions here. I don't mind the clop at all, really... The internet has numbed, and made me bored of sex.
As I said before, this fic involves all my headcanon.
no doubt this is how ill see equestria from now on ^w^ this equestrian society is my fanon woot!
Phew... I've been absolutely loving this story - for the clop as well, but especially for the amazing world-building - my brain's probably going to start leaking out the holes from all the head-canoning I've been doing.
I've probably laughed harder so far than at anything else in ages. This really does have everything, kudos to you, AnonPony!
Then, what do you know, I click on the next button, waiting for my gloriously ongoing fix of Dashie goodness, and what do I find but my old nemesis Error 502.
It is testament to your writing, good sir/madam, that I frantically tried again and again until I got through to this chapter.
Am enjoying so much, so must get back to reading before withdrawal.
I keep thinking he should actually go with this kind of style instead. It just seems to fit a lot better in my head.
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Just wanted to say, in the future when I am trying to write a harem story I will keep this type of societal background in mind, as it seems to set the tone and pacing of the story quite nicely as well as provide tasty background information, which as someone who played skyrim and obtained a copy of every book in the game, means alot to me. Thanks for this story!
Dude, you must never stop writing...EVER!!
Methinks that the author may be a Mercedes Lackey fan. The way Lero braided in Dash's feather is very hawkbrother-esque.
-raises hand- If the primary feathers last longer than the pegasus why do they fall out?
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Either they have some other reason for falling out (like, the wind-related magic gets disrupted overtime and they no longer provide top flying ability) or its an evolutionary anachronism - most probably the feathers weren't always super-durable and needed to be replaced. When pegasi evolved into magical beings they are now, the shedding was no longer needed but the mechanism for growing new feathers was still there - so a pegasi who did not shed would develop a serious health condition from feathers growing through one another.
Anyone else now want to read about a knight questing to rescue her stallion from an evil mare or a dragon or something?
Wait, knights of yore were all female and males are a once-oppressed minority... that means Celestia follows a strict affirmative action policy when hiring her guards.
Awsome the blue feather all o could think was about Harvest Moon one of my all time favorite game this is an awsome story.
Damnit that's so nice. I actually did a "Daww!"
With the talk about "styles" in the previous chapter, I now have Gangnam Style repeatedly playing in my head
OOP OOP OOPPA GANGNAM STYLE
KUNST
hmmmm summerizing.... DAAAWWWWWWW
"Kidnapping stallions." LOL. Celestia must be progressive with all the Royal Guard stallions then. I do find that bit conflicting slightly with current headcanon, perhaps something in the next chapters will clear it up. This continues to excel beyond anything I fathomed possible.
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That gets a bit more explanation in chapter 9, and if you read the comments there you'll also get to see my headcanon for Pinklestia .
Dafuq?
Wow I have to say I love the idea of this tradition. The earth pony one with a flowers is kinda neat too. I hope you don't mind if I reference this in a story if I ever get around to writing it.
Do you think unicorns just copy the flower thing or would they do their own thing with gems or something?
So what happens to them? Do the pegasi burn or eat them or something or would the entire planet eventually fill up with discarded feathers?
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Even those that didn't attach mystical significance to the feathers would still keep them safe and burn them out of tradition. Also since their personal significance would be so great to anyone that was given a feather, the recipient would keep the feather treasured and keep it to be burnt at their own funeral.
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I very much share your shame, my friend. But I'm taking this fic as inspiration. It's teaching me how to write a proper damn romance, and even proper clop by extension!
Hell, I GOTTA learn from this!
640471 I completely agree with your statement! I've read a lot of fanfics, but this definitely has some of the most detailed explanation/description of pony society.
awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww
i love this story
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I was thinking the same thing at first, but that just doesn't make sense.
I'd assume they didn't decay with time alone, hence why those in the cave were more or less in tact.
If left to the elements, they'd probably be damaged over time by either animal or nature, and thus break down eventually. Though not nearly as fast as flesh, even normal feathers take a while to go.
Not ruining another keyboard, NOT...RUINING...Dammit!
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Why?
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This chapter is a little weak imo. The whole feather thing means less because to a human who did not grow up in Equestria, it means very little to keep that feather, yeah he is doing it out of love but the statement would have been stronger had he had some kind of preconceptions IE it's old timey and embarrassing, but I love rd enough to do it anyways exc.
But love the story anyways even if I groaned a bit at this chapter.
3087206 With my tears. Reference to an earlier comment.
Third time I've read this chapter, and STILL cannot get over the d'awww factor.
D'awwwwww
I found this story before I got into clopfics and even then I found the story beautiful.
I don't normally read clopfics but I gotta say, this is absolutely amazing. I love the amount of depth and detail you put into this. Very well done.
3081008 this ones actually happy compared to the other ones I read