Oh my fucking god my head! It hurts!! Twilight's ignorance knows no bound!!

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say not ignorance, rather inability to comprehend the existence of things outside her limited understanding.
She is a 'scientist', therefore knows everything, therefore anything she does not know is deemed nothing and nonexistent.

6147076 Nope! I'm calling her The Princess of Hubris Dumbasses! Her not thinking outside the box is such a blight to my mind, it should have its own zip code!! FUCKIN DAMMIT!!!!!!

6147076 Well from what I have seen of her in the show, Twilight tends to think that everything operates within the boundaries of her understanding. Anything new proposed that threatens to break that comfortable barrier of knowledge is usually met with disbelief and some hostility. In this sense, she does not harbor the true nature of what a "scientist" should be ideally. I am a scientist and if today I were to discover something which completely violated one of the laws of physics, like me being able to telepathically change the flight trajectory of a projectile without physically contacting it, then I would begin to conduct experiments and try to see if there was anything else affecting the projectile other than my thoughts. Twilight has her own hubris that, when coupled with her current knowledge of her reality, tends to make her somewhat prideful and arrogant at times. Science and scientists rule. Without them, we couldn't be talking like this right now. We would either have never been born, or would still be under the rule of a hostile, religious fundamentalist agency.

6147087 Ha. That was funny. Yes, Twilight is arrogant in this bit. However, that was my intention. It will lead to her learning a lesson and influence some of her later decisions. Character building, is what I would call it.

6148139 God, I'd rather force-feed her head with things that exist outside her knowledge, until it blows up! Problem solved! I just hope Limelight thinks outside the box, if his uniqueness is of any indication...

6148155 thinking outside of the box is an exaggerated understatement for him. You will see. The next chapter should be out within two days.

6148173 Just promise me that he'll outshine Twi's limited knowing and understanding.

6148200 Well, his name is Limelight...

Pretty interesting chapter.

6148582 Thanks. What was interesting to you specifically?

6148829 Well, the fact that they thought it was an egg.

6148880 Yeah, I thought that they would draw that conclusion based on the shape. But right now, they don't know what it is really. But next chapter, they are going to learn a bit more.

6148896 Cool.

I hope that Limelight doesn´t appears to often, not that i hate him, but i am not sure how much i like him till now, i not even noticed when he suddenly arrived.
I guess i don´t want the adoption to be disturbs because of a possible romance, and i guess after theac got the Baby, he has probably no real reason to stay, since he was there for the artefact, and not the "animal", right?

I guess maybe i like him later.

6148947 Don't worry, I don't think that romance will be an avid circumstance for Limelight. And he won't stay too long after they discover the baby, but expect later appearances. He is an important character...

6150002 oh i accept that, i thought he is needed, i just didn´t knew what to think about him yet.

Honestly, this could be much better. Further thoughts can be found here.

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Yeah, I know. This was my first, and I am in the middle of rewriting the entire thing. However, I would still like to thank you for the analysis. It was extremely insightful and it will no doubt help me to better myself as an author. So your time and effort spent on reading and critiquing this cringe worthy attempt at a narrative is greatly appreciated.

When will there be a new chapter?

6478519 Yeah, ya caught me at a bad time. I recently moved so I'm busy settling in and finding a job. And I'm also rewriting the entire story. I'm just doing revisions and cleaning it up, not changing the important or core concepts.

Sorry.

I would like to have a new chapter please.