You all might've seen the second episode of the first season where the Mane 6 won and Nightmare Moon lost to the Elements of Harmony. Well what if that outcome never happened and something very odd occured instead?
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You all might've seen the second episode of the first season where the Mane 6 won and Nightmare Moon lost to the Elements of Harmony. Well what if that outcome never happened and something very odd occured instead?
A couple of mistakes I found:
I think this would sound better if it were worded as:
Which could be better worded as:
The L in Let's should be lowercase, since the N in Now is where the sentence actually begins.
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Reborn and resurrected mean the same thing, so just get rid of one of these words.
Ellipses need only three dots. It's also worth mentioning that you shouldn't overuse ellipses. Using them to add dramatic effect can be considered cheap. Not that using them in this way is bad, just don't over do it.
This sentence is kinda unnecessary. Most people know what reincarnation or resurrection is, so it'd be best just to scrap this.
This paragraph is also not needed, since it adds nothing to the story. Most readers will just skip this.
5903266 Like I said, I want to add quotes or something in the intro that relates to the subject involved in the chapter
5903266 Well if it ain't my "Brother". How's it going, Sombry? It's been a while.
Great story, can't wait to see more!
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Thanks
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Black, can you help me now on my new story?