Twilight Sparkle was and is one of the greatest Archmages known, but nopony gets -that- good without some development. What does it take to make a regular unicorn into the greatest of her era? And more, to become a Princess?
"Three years, huh." Applejack sniffed. "And y'all couldn't even write to tell me. Pinkie, didja know anything about this?"
"Of course!" The pink pony leapt up, displaying several curious twitches that Twilight wasn't entirely unfamiliar with. "Ear flop, eye twitch, and stomach grumble means a good friend's getting plowed!"
"PFFT!"
"Honestly, Rarity, y'all need to learn not to drink when Pinkie's talking." Applejack passed a napkin off to Fluttershy, who had been unceremoniously doused with whatever Rarity had been drinking. It looked like tea.
"'Getting plowed?'" Twilight scrunched her nose at Pinkie, who was helping Fluttershy clean her mane. "I know I asked him to lose his virginity, but-"
So I haven't read any of the other 3 stories yet (though I plan to, starting the Archmage, of course), but I noticed that the two other sequels aren't finished. Are you still working on them at the same time as this one, or are they on hiatus while this is in progress, or...?
Have yet to read this but in the description it sounds like you are filling in unexplored possibilities from the beginning of the chapter End of an Era part 1 of Archmage?
5718112 The former; I have about 4 stories I'm working on simultaneously. I'm trying not to limit myself to just ONE avenue of expression. I detailed my writing style in a blog post about a month ago, when I fell into a regular schedule.
5718407 That's almost exactly what I'm doing here.
You used the same cover image as Quantum Castaways. I have been chomping at the bit for an update to that story for over a year now. When I saw that picture on the Featured page my heart did things it ought never do.
Wow, I never thought I'd get to read more of the Archmage universe! This was a great first chapter, it just feels so good to read about these characters and setting again. The huge time jump at the end of Archmage made since and fit in well, but being able to see the in-between years is such a treat. It was the first fic that really got me hooked on Twi/Luna and all the scenes with them here remind me why.
The reunion of the six friends was so heart warming as well as funny. I'm so thrilled to see this fic and just cannot wait to read more.
"Three and a half, roughly." Twilight chuckled. "But, to get to the point, I can't teach Archer the full potential of shadow if he hadn't had lost his virginity. Even I didn't learn it was Rainbow Dash who had done the deed until almost six months after it had happened."
A few grammar related twitches there. "But, to get to the point, I can't / couldn't teach Archer the full potential of shadow (magic?) if he hadn't had lost his virginity......" Didn't really notice anything else.
Also, does Pinkie Pie now live in Baltimare or Manehattan?
I should put a letter in to the Trottingham weather team to take some readings and compare them to Canterlot'
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"Wait, what about your sister? Applebloom?"
Two word name. ______________
"T' be honest, sugarcube, ah ain't thought of that jes yet... Ah'm considerin' goin' to Dodge Junction again, checkin' in with Cherry Jubilee. Maybe movin' to Appleoosa to help Braeburn out some more." She lifted her hooves indifferently. "Ah figger ah'll tackle that problem when it comes."
"Y'all never write or nothin'! Ah swear, it's like ah'm hearin' about all this three years after it's happened!"
"No shoot. Ah thought you'd done it before movin' here."
"Well, it seems everypony's buckin' in Canterlot. Ah'm lucky enough Thunderlane's around to plow my fields."
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"Alright, sugarcube, y'all best spill. Twilight wouldn't be callin' you out iffen it weren't important or funny."
"Y'all told me you weren't gonna be with nopony s' long as you weren't part of the Wonderbolts!"
"Y'all aren't sleeping around, are ya?"
"Honestly, Rarity, y'all need to learn not to drink when Pinkie's talking."
"Y'all did WHAT now?!"
"Huh. So, wait, y'all mean to say you hadn't 'done the deed' until after you moved to Canterlot?"
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Other than grammar consistency with AJ. Not too bad of an opening chapter.
Wow Loyal this is as good as ever
Yes, more archmage-verse, I am so in and enjoying it already!
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(Finally found a place to use this!)
Commence read.
Feeling like that might be a typo.
Something happened here?
Glad to see the story behind the times prior to Twilight's ascension.
Looks like she already has plenty of things to do, and it is only the first day.
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Edited, thank you ^.^
I can definitely feel a change somewhere in the writing. Brilliant start, lets see where it goes from here.
and I friggin lost it!
Why can't I like and favorite more than once?
-Sanity is overrated
once again I am ensnared by your writing.
So I haven't read any of the other 3 stories yet (though I plan to, starting the Archmage, of course), but I noticed that the two other sequels aren't finished. Are you still working on them at the same time as this one, or are they on hiatus while this is in progress, or...?
Have yet to read this but in the description it sounds like you are filling in unexplored possibilities from the beginning of the chapter End of an Era part 1 of Archmage?
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The former; I have about 4 stories I'm working on simultaneously. I'm trying not to limit myself to just ONE avenue of expression. I detailed my writing style in a blog post about a month ago, when I fell into a regular schedule.
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That's almost exactly what I'm doing here.
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You used the same cover image as Quantum Castaways. I have been chomping at the bit for an update to that story for over a year now. When I saw that picture on the Featured page my heart did things it ought never do.
Try changing the description to something like...
(Or if It's fourth.)
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Huh. Whaddya know. I'll find a different one.
5718843 gotta admit, Loyal is a Master Wordsmith
5718989 You didn't have to do that! I'm glad you did, though, the new one is prettier.
Sweet Celestia I love you Loyal
I love it! I missed this kind of story. It also makes me want to go and re-read the original archmage, which I think I will go do now.
Love that you've gone back to exploring possibilities with one of my favorite fics.
One of these days Loyal, I'll be able to word as good as you.
On a second note, brilliant as always. Its a great pleasure to see you return to this universe.
Wow, I never thought I'd get to read more of the Archmage universe! This was a great first chapter, it just feels so good to read about these characters and setting again. The huge time jump at the end of Archmage made since and fit in well, but being able to see the in-between years is such a treat. It was the first fic that really got me hooked on Twi/Luna and all the scenes with them here remind me why.
The reunion of the six friends was so heart warming as well as funny. I'm so thrilled to see this fic and just cannot wait to read more.
Think you meant 'awoken'
Great to see this part of the story. I look forward to more!
FINALLY YESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *clears throat* Um...Yes.
4am time for bed, well I'll check Fimfiction first, new Archmage story by Loyal... Fuck sleep, I don't have time for that
Looking good so far. ^_^ laughed quite a bit in the reading of this chapter. :D
A few grammar related twitches there.
"But, to get to the point, I can't / couldn't teach Archer the full potential of shadow (magic?) if he hadn't had lost his virginity......"
Didn't really notice anything else.
Also, does Pinkie Pie now live in Baltimare or Manehattan?
Also, I eagerly await the next update.
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Two word name.
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"Huh. So, wait, y'all mean to say you hadn't 'done the deed' until after you moved to Canterlot?"
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Other than grammar consistency with AJ. Not too bad of an opening chapter.