When somepony get stigned by a manticore,well...they don't expect to live long after that. Well I was a special case as some Blessed by the moon, or "vamponies" , found me just in time and brought me to, no one less than, Princess Luna herself, she turns me and.....
this is my continuation/modification (from the end of the chapter 7) of the story Vampony Chronicles by SteampunkBrony. Also the main character in this story is one made by me.
link: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/16474/The-Vampony-Chronicles
P.S.: this is my FIRST story so constructive commentary is recommended (telling me i suck if far from helping).And the chapter i made are all mines even though i use some off the terms he (SteampunkBrony) made.If you have any ideas please write them in the comment section below.
Only problem I see is how many grammer problems (ALOT)
there are. But overall I see no problems on this reading. Keep it up! 
As stated above, there are a lot of grammar problems. But that isn't something that can't be learned to get rid of.
Also; you should've removed the "(based on someone else's story ,see desc)" part in the title, it makes it unnaturally long.
But other than that, I guess it's alright.
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Thanks guys and as i said this is my first story and where i live we speak french, so i don't practice english writing to much(exept in english class
hmm its ok it does not mock the other story (I am not speaking of literal mocking somthing more along the lines of if not done properly its like mocking) IT IS A OKAY STORY SO i GUESS i'LL FAVORITE stupid caps lock
hmm its ok it does not mock the other story (I am not speaking of literal mocking somthing more along the lines of if not done properly its like mocking) IT IS A OKAY STORY SO i GUESS i'LL FAVORITE stupid caps lock
thanks
no first for anypony on this chapter
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What is your native language, if I may ask?
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French... Is my grammar that bad??
1293837 yes but the idea of the story is interesting
I know I am not updating fast at all and I am sorry for that but my PC broke again and I am short on inspiration....
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thanks
if anybody knows a group that helps find proof-readers please let me know.
1375926 dwarfs say your welcome with music
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Man I LOVE that song!!
1377041 your welcome
if you find any errors please tell them to me
nay Rainbow Luna turned them both