When touring the countryside you decide it'd be a good idea to stop at a town you encounter along the road that goesby the name of "Coltan".
However during your visit you meet a rather spooky figure and end up hearing his life story.
A story of Tragic loss and of how a brother can turn upon another in the worst of situations.
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This is the Debut Story of my OC.
This is also my first ever story and comment feedback is really appreciated thankyou.
Please enjoy.
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This is also, to my knowledge, the first anything of anything to feature Gazelles in the MLP universe.
All locations events and foreign objects are accurately based off of 15th century Europe.
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Special thanks to gb2matty for spell checking.
Lord Korloros for Creational, dialogue, and historical referance assistance.
Mobocracy_Panda for storyboard artwork
Not all too bad. A couple instances of misspelling and some incorrect grammar, but otherwise quite interesting. Will follow.
The writing is very good
Good writing! Reminds me of Full Metal Jacket and a whole lotta World War II era Russia.
The names: they seem Slavic. And also yours. Is it something you want to draw out?
Anyway, if you like, my next one is gonna start soon! Let's continue our chats...
545001 Thanks! I'm glad you like it.
And its based off of Western Europe during the 15th century, not ww2 russia. thats just silly you silly.
The names are "Slavic" in nature because that was the main theme of culture of the Cossacks during the 15th century was as sutch.
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Aw geez, I feel like an idiot now. I'm a historian on the side, why didn't I see that before...
No matter. Now that you say 15th century, will we see (and yes, I know they're from different nations, but just think) Landsknecht characters? Seems it would be fitting...
Ah, well, it's your story. Keep up the good work!
545371 clarifying Landsknechte are renessaince, gentry, swordsman whom fought mostly in swedish and polish regions... im pretty sure that wouldnt fit here considering the main conflict of the Cossacks in the 15th cent. was with the Chrimeans. although it is an interesting idea to say the least!
*Mental note for later chapters*