A sudden and savage changeling invasion is threatening ponykind, forcing Celestia to issue the Fortress Equestria Decree: the country's border must be hold at all cost. Now, ponies and changelings are locked in a bloody conflict, with no end in sight.
Fortunately, the Princess faithful student might know how to turn the tide of war. Unfortunately, the Princess has sent her away from her laboratory in Canterlot, and worst of all: she's going to the frontlines of Ponyville.
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A definite improvement from the old version. Along some spelling and grammatical errors, the mood set by the scenes you've presented is quite confusing at times. Is it suppose to be a comedic parody or a serious moment of drama like you did with Pinkie and Fluttershy. It made me pause in my reading and stumble a bit.
However, given the source of the crossover, it fits in with the theme so it's easily ignored for the insanity of it all. Also, by the way you ended this, are you intending to write a continuation or will this remain a one-shot like the original version?
the sniper and doctor are two targets many, targeted, but has however, the doctor has the protection of a fellow, sniper when they get close to him, he has not anyone unless his cunning and his fast reasoning in the situation have to act quickly , fluttershy has it this? or is not twilight which has a fast action for situations, now use the excuse that twilight scientist,t is a scientist, well yes but it is not just a scientist twilight is an explorer, she explores and want to, meet, this does not mean that she would have a focus for medicine or engineering, and fluttershy has nothing hunter, explorer and tracker.
Following wrong standard does not deserve to be read.
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Hey. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
I didn't really have a plan when I started writing this story. Its the first fiction I have written, so I mostly just wanted to see if I was able to write something worthwhile.
Anyway, I have some ideas for a sequel, but I haven't decided if I'm gonna continue with this or try writing something else.
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What do you mean with "wrong standard"
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I have no idea what you are talking about
5976655 Since you are writing stories, you could do a story of mercenaries in Equestria, is hard to find a story with them in the world of these girls and continue until the end, only has one however, if you do not come out of the canon doing favor.
5976649 Well, if you ever do, it might be a good idea to split the contents up into chapters so you can catch and correct any errors in each chapter before you post them.