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Pikashiba156


Still young and aspiring. I play TF2, Don't Starve, Hearthstone, Starcraft ll, and another ton of games you guys don't care about.

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There exist three dimensional planes, many believe it was only two, with the light, and the darkness.
This "something" in between...they cannot decide which to team with.
This dimension is known as Shadowren.
Every single creatures that lives...has an equivalent. But not in Shadowren.
Each Dimension has an owner. But we can cross that bridge once we get there.
Note
You can read the comics to understand this better...specifically issues 17-21.
However, it isn't required.
UPDATE
I think I'll work on this a year later. Sorry, but I just don't wanna write it anymore.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 6 )

Well now I don't want to read it if I'm not going to understand it

4929463
Maaaaybe I shouldn't have said it like that...
I state a lot of the things the main ponies say in the comics...
sorry D:

I have to say that this is an okay fic. I like the concept (the alternate universe arc of the comics was my favorite). I also think that you have built your characters well. However, you do have some grammatical errors here and there, and the story does get hard to follow. If you want some more detailed and critical feedback, shoot me a message and I'll get back to you.

4929852
Thank you for the feedback, I'll re-read through the story and scout out these grammatical errors.

4930240 Yeah, getting a good pre-reader would help a lot with minor grammar issues.

I think it's great so far. Keep it up!

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