My Little Bow Chicka Bow Wow

Caboose runs into a teleporter so Church runs in after him and they find that there in a world full of magic and ponies and they cant go back the way they came

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Heaven In Blood Gualch · 9th Jul 2014 · 862 words
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Caboose Dream Come True · 9th Jul 2014 · 752 words
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Reds with Blues · 10th Jul 2014 · 764 words
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Utopianking

Utopianking #1 · Jul 10th, 2014 · 1 · · Heaven In Blood Gualch ·

While fast, the storyline seems interesting. My only suggestion is to find an editor.

AwkwardTaco

AwkwardTaco #2 · Jul 10th, 2014 · 2 · 2 · Reds with Blues ·

Blatant RvB fic. Have you no shame?

WolfWords

WolfWords #3 · Jul 10th, 2014 · 1 · · Reds with Blues ·

its not so bad i love horrible humor

Jphyper

Jphyper #4 · Jul 10th, 2014 · 2 · · Reds with Blues ·

This is... difficult to judge. It's right on the edge where I can't tell if you're truly inexperienced or if this is just a trollfic. I'm assuming the former.

I really don't know how to help other than to point you to some pages that describe how to use FiMFiction and how to write a good story. As The Syreth Clan so unkindly pointed out, you've hit the same pitfalls that many other new writers fall into. Though these pages are helpful for anyone regardless of skill, they're especially meant for writers like you who still have much to learn.
>>Click here to read the site's FAQ.
>>Click here to read the site's writing guide

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