(Rewritting) In a quiet little mountain town in Colorado, an elementary school is taking a field trip. When a few of them wonder off, they discover something that takes them to a new world. Equestria. In the evilest of all places, Stan, Kyle, Kenny, Cartman, and Butters must find a way back, or literally die of boredom. (T, Contains a bit of bad language and references. Read at own risk XD)
[Crappy Cover Art belongs to me]
Oh crap. I was wondering where that story was!
This is fun, can't wait to read more!
Omfg lmafo lagged so hard when the car crash part came up!!!
lol jewnicorn
.... i ment that in no disrespact..... im so sorry
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Fluttershy: "Oh, that's so sad... Say... What's a car anyways?"
The story's good so far. There's a few rough edges with the dialouge though - too much for me to point out here, but still not enough to be a major issue. I like how you're using Cartman and Butter's dynamic pretty well. I hope to see the same done with Stan.
Keep working on this. I have to know how Kenny dies in Equestria.
By the way, am I the only one who thinks of Twist as a ginger pony? Because that'd be a connection with potential to make.
5410796 uhhh it'd like a cart that doesn't need to be pulled because it has a machine in it to make it move u just tell it where to go with a wheel
Dat cliffhanger
Cannot wait to see more!!!
dis gunne be gud
This is actually fucking hilarious.
Eric no
Is it bad that the Minuite I learned Kyle was unicorn i ALSO made the jewnicorn joke?
JEWNICORN!!!! That made my day, Cartman.
Fluttershy's reaction to Cartman asking for meat was less intense than I ever imagined. FAIL!
Man that's a good cliffhanger.
I can't wait to read more!!
Update Dammit!
Kyle must embrace his inner Jewnicorn
I'm still here
-CactusMan
Dear SP;TTE fans,
I am not dead. I finally got time to start working in the story again, so I will be updating soon. I will hopefully have at least two new chapters by this weekend (maybe 3, depending on my time and motivation). so yeah
~TCP
I love it!
OMG I LOVE IT! JEWLICORN FOR EVER!
great start although the start to the adventure feels a little rushed
The boys arrived into the town about fifteen minutes later. Sure enough, there were lots of other technicolored ponies roaming the streets. They all looked so colorful and happy.
"Damn this place is gay as shit..." Cartman said to himself.
RED ALERT! ANTI-BRONY DETECTED! (just joking ppl)
Fluttershy's reaction is too cute bruh! I'm loving this already
Cartman is the best.
I think spike just learned something
Can you update the story I never had a lafe like I had in aweil
From a big fan
when will you update the south park story
typical cartman
no, no, no, no stop it stop it stop it stop it NOOOOO BUTTERS NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
When asking don't work, resort to the time honored tradition of blackmail to get what you want. Err, maybe ponymail? Blackpony? Anyways, have a 👍 for such an awesome, entertaining story.