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A Sneaky Trick

Chapter Three: A Sneaky Trick

Rainbow Dash stared back at her reflection. “Okay, I think I’ve got this down, but if I don’t, I guess that’s fine, as I’m gonna scare the wits out of them anyways.”

Rainbow Dash peeked downstairs, just to make sure Twilight was still busy, which she was, and went to the bedroom window. She opened the window, looked back one more time, and flew outside.

— — —

Rainbow Dash landed near the town hall. “Hmm… Who should I go scare first?”

“Rainbow Dash!”

She turned around to see an orange pegasus filly racing up to her.

“Oh, um, hi Scootaloo,” Rainbow Dash mentally kicked herself for not being more careful. Great, now I’ll have a shadow for the rest of today, unless Sweetie Belle or Applebloom want her… I’ll never get to prank anypony!

Rainbow Dash took a few paces forward, and sure enough, Scootaloo was right behind her.

“So, where have you been all day?” Scootaloo asked.

“Aw, you know here and there,” Rainbow Dash tried to sound casual, “I was over at the library helping Twilight earlier.

“Oh, really? What did ya help her with?” Scootaloo asked, curiously. “Oh, by the way, have you seen Spike? He was s’posed to help us set a few things up today, but we can’t find him anywhere.”

“Hmm… that’s odd, because Twilight can’t find Spike either,” Rainbow Dash replied, not really wanting to answer the first question.

“Yeah, that is odd. And you didn’t answer my—”

A pair of fillies came running over. “Scootaloo! We found Spike! He was waiting at the tree house! He said he’s been there all day!”

“Oh, duh! Why wasn’t that the first place we looked?” Scootaloo face-hoofed.

“Come on, we’re wastin’ daylaht!” Applebloom said.

“Okay, coming!” Sweetie Belle and Scootaloo raced after her.

“Finally! Although it’s getting late…” Rainbow Dash thought for a moment. “Yeah, I could probably scare some pony real quick before I head back to the library.”

— — —

Rainbow Dash spotted a pair of fillies walking out of Sugercube Corner. She recognized them as Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon, the two fillies that bully Scootaloo and her friends all the time. “Perfect,” She laughed as she flew down.

“Oh, look,” Diamond Tiara whispered to Silver Spoon, “Looks like the flightless Blank-Flank tattled to her ‘body-guard’”

Silver Spoon snickered.

This made Rainbow Dash angry. “You’ll think twice before messing with Scootaloo again!”

“Ooh, whatcha gonna do?” Diamond Tiara taunted, “Turn us to stone with that fancy necklace of yours? Oh wait, you can’t, because then my daddy would hunt you down and make your life miserable!”

“You’re right, I can’t do that,” Rainbow Dash agreed. “But I can do this!”

Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon stared in shock as Rainbow Dash turned back into a Changeling.

“Eek! That’s a Changeling!” Diamond Tiara cried, “Let’s get out of here before it ponynaps us!”

She galloped away, Silver Spoon racing after her, and Rainbow Dash just cracked up.

“Best. Prank. EVER!” she caught her breath, changed back to the familiar cyan pegasus and flew back to the library.

Author's Note:

If anyone wants to help me write this, feel free to send me a message with ideas or chapters or even just little tidbits. This will be kind of an experiment, but anyone who helped write this will get credit, so feel free!

(Sorry for any typos, my keyboard battery is low, (My mom won't let me replace it until it dies) so it doesn't catch every letter I push and I have to proof read it myself as my Spellcheck program crashed (I'm so mad) and Microsoft Word won't respond at this time...)

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Perteks

Perteks #1 · Jul 2nd, 2014 · 1 · ·

Ehh idea is not that bad but you need to work on world building its completly raw materiał, even small interaction like that on with carrot top should be writted. Right now its just to raw for my tastes 500 word chapter are joke

NyxIsBestPony

NyxIsBestPony #2 · Jul 2nd, 2014 · · ·

4632111 I try to aim for 1000 words in a Chapter, but for this story, I just couldn't come up with more to add while still keeping the same end for the chapter. As I said in the Author's note: I am always willing to add more to the chapters if someone has an idea that I like. And I am only 14 (though my mom says I act like I'm 8, which I won't argue with), though I have a larger vocabulary than most, I am still [technically] only a child.

Perteks

Perteks #3 · Jul 2nd, 2014 · · ·

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Using your age as argument don't make it any better just saying. There is a lot of 'how to'guides try to search for them.

rarerarity

rarerarity #4 · Jul 2nd, 2014 · · ·

4632903
Just try adding more descriptive words to extend the word count of the chapter. It works all the time.

Smaug the Golden

Smaug the Golden #5 · Jul 2nd, 2014 · 1 · ·

4632903 Look, using the fact that you're fourteen won't gain you much leeway here. Writing here is mainly judged by skill, not age. We have no way of knowing your actual age, so we judge by work instead of age. I'm fourteen, but I'm still judged by my work instead of my age.

Fervidor

Fervidor #6 · Jul 3rd, 2014 · 2 · ·

4632903

I'd say the main problem is that you have an idea but seem to lack a solid concept and structure. Having a low word count is not necessarily a problem in and of itself, it's more of a sympton than anything. Even if you are making this up as you go along, you should have a basic idea of what you want to achieve with each chapter: Try to make the chapter establish at least one important thing, then let the next chapter build on that and establish the next important thing. That's how you form a narrative.

You don't need to be in a hurry. If you can write three chapters with 1500 words total, then that means you can write one chapter with 1500 words just as well, And there's no reason these three chapters could not have simply been put together into the first chapter. It does establish the premise: Rainbow gets turned into a changeling and decides to use it to play pranks. That's actually a pretty decent plot point to start off on. The next chapter should deal with the consequences of this decision. Perhaps something goes wrong and everypony ends up thinking she's a real changeling? Or maybe she stumbles on an actual changeling invasion and decides to inflitrate them to find out what they're planning? The important thing is that you don't just decide what is going to happen in the chapter, but that you decide what the chapter is actually about,

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