A Bit Buggy

After the Changeling attack in Canterlot, Twilight finds a spell that can give a pony the ability to see a Changeling even disguised as a pony. When she tries the spell for the first time, however, it didn't go right at all!

Chapters (3)

The New Spell · 25th Jun 2014 · 541 words
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The Realization · 29th Jun 2014 · 398 words
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A Sneaky Trick · 2nd Jul 2014 · 539 words
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Perteks

Perteks #1 · Jul 2nd, 2014 · 1 · · A Sneaky Trick ·

Ehh idea is not that bad but you need to work on world building its completly raw materiał, even small interaction like that on with carrot top should be writted. Right now its just to raw for my tastes 500 word chapter are joke

NyxIsBestPony

NyxIsBestPony #2 · Jul 2nd, 2014 · · · A Sneaky Trick ·

4632111 I try to aim for 1000 words in a Chapter, but for this story, I just couldn't come up with more to add while still keeping the same end for the chapter. As I said in the Author's note: I am always willing to add more to the chapters if someone has an idea that I like. And I am only 14 (though my mom says I act like I'm 8, which I won't argue with), though I have a larger vocabulary than most, I am still [technically] only a child.

Perteks

Perteks #3 · Jul 2nd, 2014 · · · A Sneaky Trick ·

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Using your age as argument don't make it any better just saying. There is a lot of 'how to'guides try to search for them.

rarerarity

rarerarity #4 · Jul 2nd, 2014 · · · A Sneaky Trick ·

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Just try adding more descriptive words to extend the word count of the chapter. It works all the time.

Smaug the Golden

Smaug the Golden #5 · Jul 2nd, 2014 · 1 · · A Sneaky Trick ·

4632903 Look, using the fact that you're fourteen won't gain you much leeway here. Writing here is mainly judged by skill, not age. We have no way of knowing your actual age, so we judge by work instead of age. I'm fourteen, but I'm still judged by my work instead of my age.

Fervidor

Fervidor #6 · Jul 3rd, 2014 · 2 · · A Sneaky Trick ·

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I'd say the main problem is that you have an idea but seem to lack a solid concept and structure. Having a low word count is not necessarily a problem in and of itself, it's more of a sympton than anything. Even if you are making this up as you go along, you should have a basic idea of what you want to achieve with each chapter: Try to make the chapter establish at least one important thing, then let the next chapter build on that and establish the next important thing. That's how you form a narrative.

You don't need to be in a hurry. If you can write three chapters with 1500 words total, then that means you can write one chapter with 1500 words just as well, And there's no reason these three chapters could not have simply been put together into the first chapter. It does establish the premise: Rainbow gets turned into a changeling and decides to use it to play pranks. That's actually a pretty decent plot point to start off on. The next chapter should deal with the consequences of this decision. Perhaps something goes wrong and everypony ends up thinking she's a real changeling? Or maybe she stumbles on an actual changeling invasion and decides to inflitrate them to find out what they're planning? The important thing is that you don't just decide what is going to happen in the chapter, but that you decide what the chapter is actually about,

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