Twiluna Fan(clop?)fic. Twi and Luna magically bound to each other. Gryphons massing at the borders. Chrysalis trying to get back into Equestria. Discord being Discord. Canterlot Nobles trying to tear Princess Twi's authority apart. YAY!
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i like the end of this chapter ........ i give you a and a for that end
ps. i am looking forward to more
One thing I must ask, did I get Zecora's rhyming right? It's so hard to write her dialogue, and I'm half tempted to start flipping tables and just have her speak normally.
In all seriousness, with Chapter 7, did it come across as forced or dull? Not entirely happy with the Clop scene.
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It felt...underdescribed? While it was a sex scene, I don't think I'd call it clop. I've seen sex scenes in published novels that were more explicit. And no, I'm not talking about romance novels (the books that immediately spring to mind are space opera).
The bit with Cadance was hilarious but Luna's ending thought made be burst out laughing!
Also you did the Zecora rhyming very well much better then me I especially liked her last line lol!
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It was from the point of view of Twilight, who was trying to avoid the event mentally. The author cut out at the moment when detail would have made sense, when she gave in to lust and magic stuffs
This amused me to a retarded level of happiness