"Yes, Trixie was beloved by all in her school days," Trixie continued. "Until Princess Celestia's personal student grew jealous of Trixie's talent and popularity and conspired to sabotage Trixie's reputation using slander and dirty tricks."
"Trixie, how many Apples live on Sweet Apple Acres?" Trixie sniffed. "Four, obviously." Appleseed looked mildly impressed, so Trixie continued. "There is Big Macintosh, Apple Bloom, Appleseed and...the pegasus who is always sleeping in the trees. So four, and the cook."
Well, she DID get the number right. That's gotta be worth SOMETHING.
"Ah'm just saying if he rode her a few times and gave her what she wants she might quiet down some!"
Wisdom of the ages.
"Just ain't something most unicorns care about, Miss Trixie. That Twilight filly was askin' me a whole bunch of questions about the thises and thats of making Zap Apple jam awhile back and fore that no city slicker pony done bothered. It's like they think plants just grow out of the ground on their own."
What absurdity. That's like imagining the sun would rise and fall without the direct intervention of a magical royal.
I haven't really started reading as I haven't caught up yet with episodes (spoilers), but just wanted to say that I'm really digging the new cover pic; it's so appropriate and funny at the same time.
Because you don't scoop someone up with a magic tornado-
Right, I'm gonna have to stop you right there. What you wrote did not ONCE ever bring up any connection to any tornados. It actually seems to imply that Applejack got lifted off her hooves and moved down-range a bit, not plucked like a feather and tossed around in the air. You might imagine it as a tornado since you want it to come across as such, but you'll need to re-word it for the non-psychics of the fan base.
5357075 I thought it was apparent from the way clouds were circling overhead followed by her being physically lifted off the ground and regaining conscious someplace she didn't recognize. There are really only so many ways that happens.
5357338 It's not actually stated that she's somewhere she doesn't recognize. Just that she's picked up and is physically unwell when she touches down again.
I want you to know, Donraj, people in my office are glaring at me for laughing so loudly while reading this chapter.
This was all win. Trixie and the ninjas, the line about the cook, even the idea that classmates of Applebloom's spy on Applejack bucking. (Snips and Snails just wanted to learn about farming! ) I hope we hear more about what happened with Fluttershy.
As a general note, I want to say I love the way you write Trixie and Luna's dialogue. I feel that the more in-3rd-person Trixie is, and the more old-timie Luna is, the better, especially in a comedy. Please keep it up!
Asymmetrical personalities are an acquired taste, if nothing else... At the very least, it's clear that she's not a sociopath. I look forward to seeing what happens next.
5422804 I don't care! Wikipedia is written and shit by dumb people who don't know what they are doing! I searched up an article about the geography of Alaska and all I got was FUCKING CULTURE!!!!!
... Umm, unless I'm just blind, you never said where exactly Applejack WENT. Why CAN'T she get back home?
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And if Luna wanted to know who was 'spreading lies', why didn't she just enter the dreams of the one she got the 'lies' from and ask them?
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And as of right now, I think Trixie has a better chance getting with Granny Smith.
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Well, I await the next chapter.
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Because you don't scoop someone up with a magic tornado to drop them off somewhere next door, and she didn't recognize the area immediately?
It was more "this is annoying" then "I'm in a foreign country"
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Well, maybe you don't.
5353599 Just imagine how Applejack must feel
This is hilariously messed up
I want to read Trixie's poem now.
Sunset Shimmer!
Granny wants Big Mac to get some
Well, she DID get the number right. That's gotta be worth SOMETHING.
Wisdom of the ages.
What absurdity. That's like imagining the sun would rise and fall without the direct intervention of a magical royal.
... SHIMMER. OF COURSE. IT ALL MAKES SENSE NOW.
I haven't really started reading as I haven't caught up yet with episodes (spoilers), but just wanted to say that I'm really digging the new cover pic; it's so appropriate and funny at the same time.
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Right, I'm gonna have to stop you right there. What you wrote did not ONCE ever bring up any connection to any tornados. It actually seems to imply that Applejack got lifted off her hooves and moved down-range a bit, not plucked like a feather and tossed around in the air. You might imagine it as a tornado since you want it to come across as such, but you'll need to re-word it for the non-psychics of the fan base.
Yes! Ninjas! And their names Desuke, Saito, Ukyo, AND BLIIINKYYYY!!!
5357075 I thought it was apparent from the way clouds were circling overhead followed by her being physically lifted off the ground and regaining conscious someplace she didn't recognize. There are really only so many ways that happens.
5357338
It's not actually stated that she's somewhere she doesn't recognize. Just that she's picked up and is physically unwell when she touches down again.
5358294 I thought that would be clear from context. It was dark and she was a li'l disoriented.
Love the new cover btw. Wish I could find it on DA
I want you to know, Donraj, people in my office are glaring at me for laughing so loudly while reading this chapter.
This was all win. Trixie and the ninjas, the line about the cook, even the idea that classmates of Applebloom's spy on Applejack bucking. (Snips and Snails just wanted to learn about farming! ) I hope we hear more about what happened with Fluttershy.
As a general note, I want to say I love the way you write Trixie and Luna's dialogue. I feel that the more in-3rd-person Trixie is, and the more old-timie Luna is, the better, especially in a comedy. Please keep it up!
Asymmetrical personalities are an acquired taste, if nothing else...
At the very least, it's clear that she's not a sociopath.
I look forward to seeing what happens next.
Oh man, that conversation between AJ and Trixie at the start of the chapter is made of hilarity. I laughed out loud at least twice. Kudos! ^_^
It's pre-Madonna. Not prima donna
5422776 http://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Prima_donna
5422804 I don't care! Wikipedia is written and shit by dumb people who don't know what they are doing! I searched up an article about the geography of Alaska and all I got was FUCKING CULTURE!!!!!
5422804 And plus a Pre-Madonna is someone overacting, dramatic, prissy, and an overall bitch. Basically..... Trixie.
5422817 I've never heard that term before, and either way prima donna is older
5422813 http://i.word.com/idictionary/prima%20donna
5422822 I don't CARE!! ....... the dots are a link BTW
Yeah, I could see Luna doing this. Was laughing my ass off again. I love this story.