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Luna would do that shes so cool. Armor for the fellas...awesome!! I am a big fan of these kinds of fics where one takes the original story and adds to it like this. Great work here. Reading On.
two options for Luna. Either she faked that so midnight would be at ease or got the to of them to meet in her dream
If Luna just made it up, then... That's sweet and mean at the same time. Then again, if Celestia can pull a wandering soul to Eqestria, Luna can probably help make the dream a reality.
God dammit this was good intell celestia was like yah I brought you here.
Nice story so far, can't wait to read the rest.
Also, just for adding a bit of atmosphere to the dream part of the chapter, I recommend adding the Song Of Healing from Majora's Mask.
That section that this sentence is a part of is a good thing. It's not overly cliche, and best of all it ties up a loose end, assuming it was not just a plain 'ol dream. Most HiE fanfics in general never really touch up on what happened back on Earth after the protagonist left. No mention of their families, no mention of the life they left behind other than mentioning a job, education, and a few skills or perhaps just "Oh, I miss doing this, and I wish I still had my computer/PS3/XBOX/cell phone!" followed by an explanation for the in-fic characters that don't know what the object mentioned was.
*Finished reading chapter*
So it WAS just a dream. A dream from Luna, but still just a dream. Even so, it was still nice.
5234955 You do realize that you can kniw of something without knowing everything about it like say I know that there is a TV show called Breaking Bad but have never watched the show ever. Celestia can know of the basic details of the show like "Twilight Sparkle and her fellow pony friends go on adventures all the while learning about the magic of friendship" but also not know in depth what each and every episode is about.
I can give you one. Its for the convince of the plot.
Now I'm caught up with where I left off two years ago. Nice story idea. I don't care what others say about shoehorning or gary-stu, I still like the idea of living out the show. Besides, gary-stu characters are awesome! Look at Superman, Goku, or even Spider-Man, characters that get labelled as such but people still love them. As the saying goes, 'it ain't broke don't fix it'.
Sorry about the rant, but I hate the label of gary-stu.
On a side note, how do you put that cool line thing to space out moments in your story? I'm more worried about that then I am with Celestia knowing the things she did. Best I like to think, every fanfic is a parr-a-lel world from the show. Think the multiverse, but with ponies!
Once again, Celestia gets someone else to do a crap job. Does this surprise anyone?
I honestly hate the all knowing Celestia bullshit it makes the story less interesting.
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Yeah, but it's explained how she knew much later. It makes sense for the most part, especially how she found his soul in the void/barrier.
And when i say much later, I mean MUCH later, as it takes a plot point into use to explain it.
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There is the Headcannon of Chessmaster Celestia are you honestly surprised?
Why can't I thumbs up this story?
thank you he got over that really quickly
Huh that worked out nicely. Though with the realization that this mlp is gonna be different, he should work on getting stronger and training.
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She told him to be honest with his friends in that regard.
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That's cool, but was it really necessary to delete my comment?
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I swear that was an accident, plz forgive me
So Celestia is Truck-Kun? I don't know if I like or love that idea...
Nly?
Pushing a little bit too much here author, if you weren't 1 million words in i'd advise to rewrite that