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Just how I imagined he'd act you pulled them off perfectly!!! Also am I detecting a bit of Steven Universe in here or is it just me.
So why couldn't Twilight help she didn't have a younger sibling to watch right?
7032049 It started off a day between brothers, just the two of them
They weren't expecting to get involved in royal matters
7032359 Alternate Universe
You did a perfect job with the characters. Loved the chap.
Nightmare? ......Sorry but is that like a Nightmare Moon foreshadowing? I totally understand it can go in multiple ways: 1). Twinken has a nightmare about the two colts and one filly 2). Nightmare Moon returns (which is highly unlikely...?). 3). Something totally different that the readers won't expect!
Now other than the guesses I've made, I think you really show great character development for Twinken and the filly named "Paini Coca". I can really see Paini trying to express herself to her father in the future - but that's just my opinion. Twinken shows great maturity in handling these kind of situations when it comes to 'power', he doesn't see his brother as a tool for power but as a regular pony and he defends that loyalty. Very Impressive. It's been great to see Twinken character development since the "Brother For A Day" event back in season 1... And now back to Midnight, Seeing he has a deep secret he has hidden from his family and friends I think this will cause much "unfaithfulness" amoung them (Spoiler maybe?).
Overall 5/5
~Shiboah
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7057052 That's one way of looking at it
Awesome chapter. A few nitpicks.
",so and I " I'm not really sure what's going on there. "So I would probably have" maybe?
colt
Nice chapter and great characters, I like where you're taking this.
Midnight is giving me some Yellow Diamond vibes.