Thousands of years following the story of Archmage, Twilight takes on a new student. One who doesn't know the first thing about advanced magic. One who needs to start from Square One.
Hmm yes, I like how you handle Star's way to learn. I can identify with that part of herself. I only learn what I'm interested in, the other things seem really complicated to me until I really want to learn them.
Oh, and Lotus being a decendant of Rarity? Brilliant. I wonder if she and Star will end up together. It'd be nice.
Alas, you kept me reading the whole Archmage saga for the last week. I wasn't at all convinced when I saw the prequel, mostly because of the Sad tag. But boy was it worth the chance. Thanks for writing this. Keep up the good work.
Wow... I have no words. You've addressed all of my concerns. Thanks!
Except I am a bit worried with where this spa scene is going...
And if this were any other fanfic with the mature tag I would be worried with good reason...
Wait, lotus paid for this thing on the house... Clearly the elements are a plot point... Lotus would serve well as a connection to this plot point...
Goddammit, lotus has a crush on star, doesn't she?
THEY'RE GOING TO HAVE SEX NEXT CHAPTER, AREN'T THEY?
HDJRURQHKPBFEOFDKLCOPDEOIFSOPBDTPS... I actually have no problem with this. The two problems I had with it in archmage aren't here.
1. Star doesn't have to have sex for the story to continue.
2. I can see it when it's coming. Archmage made me think that the sex would be teen when it happened and that the mature tag was for the gore. When luna stated that twilight had to have sex, my brain somehow guessed that the story would somehow become pure clop from that point on. In this case, I know that won't be true, because I understand the way you write Archmage.
It still feels a bit rushed, though.
And I'm still against it. If I wanted to read clop, I would read clop. This isn't a clopfic. It's a story with random paragraphs of clop that are there for no real reason other than for there to be clop.
4465075 I would be really glad you aren't being that predictable, but slightly confused about this story having a sex tag, and why you chose to emphasize the tail arousal.
But I'm glad you cleared that up, and I really like that you answered most of my questions here.
And if what you say is true... God damn it, I'm so curious about how you could possibly include it, and I've come to such an understanding of the amount of thought you put into this, you take this really seriously and it shows...
I am GENUINELY intrigued about this.
And because of that, I actually am looking forward to seeing how it is handled.
You win. You somehow made me exited about this.
You get your 301st thumbs up.
You had my fav from the start.
Screw that, this is amazing! God, I can't even begin to describe how well written, planned, and edited this thing is! You have solid, worldbuilding-level headcannons, realistic situations, nopony is out of character, the few OCs you have are realistic and well written... Everything about this fic is perfect. Only one thing was wrong in my opinion, and now you've changed that for me.
A little something I like about this story, and the first Archmage story as well, is how you describe magic. The way you go into detail of it, is almost a scientific scholarly approach. I've never read a story where they went into detail as such, and I can say I am glad I found one like yours.
I certainly can't wait to see how Square One keeps going, and the twists that Star Caster is going to have to deal with in her education by the Archmage, Princess Twilight Sparkle herself.
I have to agree. Part of the reason I like this approach is because far to many fics use the ridiculous 'because magic' excuse for when things happen with no explanation. Just because magic often runs counter to the laws of physics, doesn't mean that it doesn't have rules and laws of its own. Chaos has no rules or laws, it simply is. Any system that imposes strict guidelines on something like that has to have laws. And there needs to be consequences when said laws are broken.
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Hmm yes, I like how you handle Star's way to learn. I can identify with that part of herself. I only learn what I'm interested in, the other things seem really complicated to me until I really want to learn them.
Oh, and Lotus being a decendant of Rarity? Brilliant. I wonder if she and Star will end up together. It'd be nice.
Alas, you kept me reading the whole Archmage saga for the last week. I wasn't at all convinced when I saw the prequel, mostly because of the Sad tag. But boy was it worth the chance. Thanks for writing this. Keep up the good work.
Not bad. Not bad at all. I sense a major plot point in the tale of the Elements.
Dang it, I'm relating this to manga again! Someone please help, as I'm starting to believe that this is a mental illness!
4458260 you.
That was funny
tenouttaten
Oh Star, you've just been promoted to plot device.
In every sense.
Commence read.
Ah, the ancestral lines should be interesting.
I didn't get that this was a sequel to archmage until this chapter.
Great chapter! Keep up the awesome work.
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LOL
Wow...
I have no words.
You've addressed all of my concerns.
Thanks!
Except I am a bit worried with where this spa scene is going...
And if this were any other fanfic with the mature tag I would be worried with good reason...
Wait, lotus paid for this thing on the house...
Clearly the elements are a plot point...
Lotus would serve well as a connection to this plot point...
Goddammit, lotus has a crush on star, doesn't she?
THEY'RE GOING TO HAVE SEX NEXT CHAPTER, AREN'T THEY?
HDJRURQHKPBFEOFDKLCOPDEOIFSOPBDTPS... I actually have no problem with this. The two problems I had with it in archmage aren't here.
1. Star doesn't have to have sex for the story to continue.
2. I can see it when it's coming. Archmage made me think that the sex would be teen when it happened and that the mature tag was for the gore. When luna stated that twilight had to have sex, my brain somehow guessed that the story would somehow become pure clop from that point on. In this case, I know that won't be true, because I understand the way you write Archmage.
It still feels a bit rushed, though.
And I'm still against it. If I wanted to read clop, I would read clop. This isn't a clopfic. It's a story with random paragraphs of clop that are there for no real reason other than for there to be clop.
But you made it better for me. So, thanks loyal!
4465007
what if I told you...
Lotus is married.
4465075
I would be really glad you aren't being that predictable, but slightly confused about this story having a sex tag, and why you chose to emphasize the tail arousal.
But I'm glad you cleared that up, and I really like that you answered most of my questions here.
And if what you say is true... God damn it, I'm so curious about how you could possibly include it, and I've come to such an understanding of the amount of thought you put into this, you take this really seriously and it shows...
I am GENUINELY intrigued about this.
And because of that, I actually am looking forward to seeing how it is handled.
You win. You somehow made me exited about this.
You get your 301st thumbs up.
You had my fav from the start.
Screw that, this is amazing! God, I can't even begin to describe how well written, planned, and edited this thing is! You have solid, worldbuilding-level headcannons, realistic situations, nopony is out of character, the few OCs you have are realistic and well written... Everything about this fic is perfect. Only one thing was wrong in my opinion, and now you've changed that for me.
Like, damn, are you CelestAI or something?
4465141
I just like to think I have a few good friends, some amazing support, and a lot of practice under my belt.
does this mean no TwiLuStar threeway?
A little something I like about this story, and the first Archmage story as well, is how you describe magic. The way you go into detail of it, is almost a scientific scholarly approach. I've never read a story where they went into detail as such, and I can say I am glad I found one like yours.
I certainly can't wait to see how Square One keeps going, and the twists that Star Caster is going to have to deal with in her education by the Archmage, Princess Twilight Sparkle herself.
I'll be waiting for each update.
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I have to agree. Part of the reason I like this approach is because far to many fics use the ridiculous 'because magic' excuse for when things happen with no explanation. Just because magic often runs counter to the laws of physics, doesn't mean that it doesn't have rules and laws of its own. Chaos has no rules or laws, it simply is. Any system that imposes strict guidelines on something like that has to have laws. And there needs to be consequences when said laws are broken.
When you're alone to be happy, and happy to be alone
The night referred to star in such a way... Did I read it wrong, reading too much into it, or does this mean what I think it means?
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So where as Archer and Twi started virgins. Star's a horn dog XD. That's pretty funny actually.