Thousands of years following the story of Archmage, Twilight takes on a new student. One who doesn't know the first thing about advanced magic. One who needs to start from Square One.
4417594 Testing 1.2.3 was an Episode in My Little Pony Friendship is Magic Season 4 i believe it was Episode 21 or 22 Dash learned the history of the wonderbolts while Flying when all other learning process failed. Rainbow is totally able to remember every detail while flying an is aware of everything that happens around her in the Episode but failed to learn anything while twilight was trying to teach her the history
4417728 Twilight and me in this instance is correct because they are serving as the direct object. Just how you would say "How would you like to have dinner with me tonight." You wouldn't say "How would you like to have dinner with I tonight." The fact that it is a compound object makes no difference. Grammar!
Mother FUCK me in the ASS that was a nice read. Also, Miss Star swears like a sailor Good stuff so far. And you told me you can't make characters; you lie!
Very excited to see where this goes. I can't wait until she hopefully gets to learn shadow magic.
The only thing about this story I'm just not so keen on is the first-person. That's not anyone's fault but mine, though. I guess I'm just a third person fan, myself.
Ok, Star can be kinda slow sometimes. I mean he freaks out about having dinner with the princesses, but does he not realize the dinner is even cooked by them?
I was going to explain why I hated clop in archmage, but then this fucking chapter did it for me.
It was a part of the story where the heroine was engaged in an epic struggle with the forces of the evil overlord, and the text suddenly went into depth with how her levitation worked as she swung her sword.
The first story is like this book. It draws you in with compelling characters and plotlines, and then, bam! Twilight needs to have sex with somepony in order for the story to continue.
I have nothing against clop, but I think that archmage would have done just as well without it, maybe better, considering the number of people who would turn down a story if it's rating is mature.
The worst part of it all is that this story could easily have the clop edited out and be re-uploaded as a teen version. You don't even need to go into detail about it, and in fact, later on in archmage the clop basicly turns into teen rated stuff anyways. So yeah. Do what five score did.
Random question: how old is Star? In my mind I'm seeing a filly dropping f-bombs everywhere. That's hilarious mind you but it got me thinking about how old she really is.
Shoot, I already blew throughall three chapters... So far this story is just as good as Archmage which is certainly saying something since for me it is second only to Fallout: Equestria. Please update this soon, I want more!
I am really not fond of reading the word fuck every couple of paragraphs, sometimes it feels well placed and sometime it just feels so awkward to read.
Other than that this seems like a very interesting story.
I really like star's character, full of her own personality, and not some other pony's. She's your typical nerdy clumsy main character, with a twist. I like how much she curses in front of royalty, and how she doesn't (or isn't very good at) hiding some of her less positive traits. Her being tought at such a strict school could have definetly played a role in her acting like this. She never really got to act the way she does now, but now she is, and it is kind of weird to everyone else because they got over that stuff when they were younger. I see so much potential with thus story, especially after how good the first book was.
Ok, really good feels this chapter.
I love that. Learning how to do things on accident. Good work so far.
Ah, so you borrowed the idea from Testing, 1, 2, 3! Nice.
OK, so we have a pony that swears a lot and is clumsy and gets nervous around princesses. ...Has Derpy been reincarnated into a unicorn?!
This was a great chapter as always! Can't wait to read more!
But seriously, is that Derpy?4417499
Never read it.
As always another amazing read !!! Great job
Yay, keep em coming.
Though for some reason I keep thinking a young skinny colt would have been better as Star given how your writing her character.
Sweet good chapter
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Testing 1.2.3 was an Episode in My Little Pony Friendship is Magic Season 4 i believe it was Episode 21 or 22 Dash learned the history of the wonderbolts while Flying when all other learning process failed. Rainbow is totally able to remember every detail while flying an is aware of everything that happens around her in the Episode but failed to learn anything while twilight was trying to teach her the history
Yesssss.
But:
Is Star a boy or a girl? I don't think it's been made clear yet.
4417728 Twilight and me in this instance is correct because they are serving as the direct object. Just how you would say "How would you like to have dinner with me tonight." You wouldn't say "How would you like to have dinner with I tonight." The fact that it is a compound object makes no difference. Grammar!
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HEY.
Six thousand years is a LONG time.
Luna's allowed to be ineloquent from time to time.
>.>
totally not author error.4417825
The difference between Filly and Colt is...?
4417843 I have no idea, but that might be my lack of sleep of talking.
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filly = young mare
colt = young stallion
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It's an MLP Season 4 episode silly.
The one where Rainbow Dash has to study for her test?
Where Twilight figures out a personalized study method for Rainbow based on how she actually learns things?
Seems to me Twilight in this chapter should at least allude to that. "I've done this sort of thing for a friend before." or something.
Mother FUCK me in the ASS that was a nice read. Also, Miss Star swears like a sailor Good stuff so far. And you told me you can't make characters; you lie!
Very excited to see where this goes. I can't wait until she hopefully gets to learn shadow magic.
The only thing about this story I'm just not so keen on is the first-person. That's not anyone's fault but mine, though. I guess I'm just a third person fan, myself.
Anyways, continue on!
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I was actually thinking that same thing, to be honest.
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maybe...No, not at all >.> <. <
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Ok, Star can be kinda slow sometimes.
I mean he freaks out about having dinner with the princesses, but does he not realize the dinner is even cooked by them?
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*she
This is written spectacularly I can't wait for more!
4418653 i know that, how did i miss the "s". Are there any proofreaders for comments?
Very nice! Can't wait for more!
Star is adorable and hilarious xD
And that method of magic is something I haven't seen before, imagining lifting it yourself... Hadn't thought of that. Interesting.
Is Spike gonna be in this story?
So cute
It seems Twilight learned something from when she helped Rainbow Dash study for her test in season 4!
(Yes, I know S4 technically isn't completely canon for this story, but I immediately saw the parallel)
Also, Star is so cute when she's discovering her true power.:D
I was going to explain why I hated clop in archmage, but then this fucking chapter did it for me.
The first story is like this book. It draws you in with compelling characters and plotlines, and then, bam! Twilight needs to have sex with somepony in order for the story to continue.
I have nothing against clop, but I think that archmage would have done just as well without it, maybe better, considering the number of people who would turn down a story if it's rating is mature.
The worst part of it all is that this story could easily have the clop edited out and be re-uploaded as a teen version. You don't even need to go into detail about it, and in fact, later on in archmage the clop basicly turns into teen rated stuff anyways. So yeah. Do what five score did.
Random question: how old is Star? In my mind I'm seeing a filly dropping f-bombs everywhere. That's hilarious mind you but it got me thinking about how old she really is.
This is a sequel to the story Archmage, taking place several thousand years after that story's end.
DAAAAAMN SPOILERS!!!!
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story's been finished for like a year dude XD
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hehe I know
and I expected twilight to became alicorn but still...
anyways great fics
Thank you so much for making a sequel. I would give you a crying but happy pony if I knew how to do it on my old ass phone.
Commence read.
Interesting catch phrase.
Shoot, I already blew throughall three chapters... So far this story is just as good as Archmage which is certainly saying something since for me it is second only to Fallout: Equestria. Please update this soon, I want more!
It is good !! Maybe some more twiluna in here
Ponysax
I am really not fond of reading the word fuck every couple of paragraphs, sometimes it feels well placed and sometime it just feels so awkward to read.
Other than that this seems like a very interesting story.
Yeesh she's such a spaz. I can't wait till she get's much better at-...
...go on...
4417499 Twilight has learned many lessons. You would think by now, she's learned how to put those lessons to practical use. ^^
To the author, Loyal.
THIS WAS AWESOME DO IT AGAIN.
Faved. Tracked. More, now.
Star is so cute!!
I really like star's character, full of her own personality, and not some other pony's. She's your typical nerdy clumsy main character, with a twist. I like how much she curses in front of royalty, and how she doesn't (or isn't very good at) hiding some of her less positive traits. Her being tought at such a strict school could have definetly played a role in her acting like this. She never really got to act the way she does now, but now she is, and it is kind of weird to everyone else because they got over that stuff when they were younger. I see so much potential with thus story, especially after how good the first book was.
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So far I'm loving this fic.
I'm only 2 chapters in an I already love this story. Can't wait for the rest. Actually, you know what, I'm reading the next one now!