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dat dream 5 for you
Dude, you just had her raped.
And you made her want it. When he's trying to enslave and destroy her world.
It's not okay.
It's. Just. NOT.
Great chapter. It was very hot and then it turnes funny once the dream ended. I hope the next chapter comes soon, so that we can find out how Celestia came to be the lover of the Overlord.
4745840 Thank you. Glad someone appreciates it.
4745863 I'm actually working on that chapter still, but i plan to resolve the Lyra Heartstrings deal a few chapters back before getting onto that.
Wait a minute. Not more than two chapters ago this "overlord" guy was making a big stink about how morally repugnant it was to actually raie people, like he was putting forward this whole argument of "I may be evil but even I don't believe in raping people". But he just raped Celestia! In THIS chapter! He snuck into her room, tied her up, and essentially raped her whilst brainwashing her into WANTING it!
That's seriously hypocritical and messed up!
Hmmmm,
Mistresses; Gilda, (Luna, Rarity, Fleur De Lis or Cadance) and Dark Celestia
Minor Mistresses; Twilight, Cheerilee, Spitfire, Chrysalis and Maud Pie
Ok guys, remember that the sex scene took place in a -dream-, that's key info there. It didn't say that the Overlord manipulated the dreamscape to do that, in fact Luna mentioned last chapter about the dreams Celestia has had, which means that this was a recurring thing even before his release from the crystal. Meaning it was all her, her desires, and her mind, no one else. It's a glimpse, if you will, into her former relationship with the Overlord before his sealing.
As for my comment that I originally came to post:
I'm enjoying the story, though just a couple of backstory questions if you don't mind answering them.
1. Is this the Third Overlord (I am assuming as much since he is the Master of the Infernal Abyss) or one of the others?
2. If it's the Third Overlord, how did he get from the Infernal Abyss to the Netherworld Tower?
3. Since he was already called the Master of the Abyss, does this mean that at some point the Wraiths he acquired from taking over the Infernal Abyss will appear at some point? Perhaps as a backup to increase his army number from fifty to higher?
4. Having access to the Netherworld Tower -and- the Tower Heart, does he have access to the Halo, Evil Presence, and Target spells from Overlord 2 or only the ones from the former Tower?
5. How grand of a scale will our Dark Lord be waging this war? Like just him and the fifty minions or going so far as to have Grubby raising catapults like the Fourth Overlord to take down the pony's kingdom even faster than the Glorious Empire?
6. Will Chrysalis be making an appearance in this story? Seeing how she feeds on love and was itching to take over, I could see her as an excellent pawn possibly.
If you plan to answer these later in the story, no worries then, no spoilers. ^_^
Only two complaints, but they are -not- held against the story, just stating to state:
1. Not a fan of the sexual content, but that is just not my cup of tea, you write this story how you want. I know I'll read it regardless.
2. This one will be hard to describe, but it feels to me like our Dark Sire has too much Meta knowledge. Like with Gilda, tying her up and all as the trap, that was almost too perfect. Especially to have his hatred of Rape, seemed nigh improbable for that to be so perfect. No hate, I promise, just saying it seemed like he knew that a rapist would be among the party that showed up, which maybe I'm just a lowly minion, but I wouldn't have accounted that.
Now for the best part, pros!:
1. I really love your rendition of the Dark One, very creative and sticks to evil for evil. Warms my minion heart.
2. Even though I said I was not a fan, I do give you props for the sexual scenes, as they let us into just how the characters function in the story. Such as Celestia having a lust for the Overlord that strong raises questions of their history and makes me want to read on for more information. I wouldn't call them unneeded for they do serve a good purpose in advancing the story.
3. I know this is a Post Apocalyptic Earth after ww3 so I do enjoy the concept that perhaps this is taking place on familiar grounds and we might recognize like France (Prance).
Either way, I am enjoying the story so keep it up! I look forward to the next chapter.
Minion Dribble, back to the Burrows!
P.S. Thanks Gnarl for helping Dribble write this.
4746121 THANK YOU! Oh you can't believe how good it is for someone that's not taking this as seriously as others. As for the questions you got, I'll answer as best i can.
1. This Overlord is not the Third overlord. This is actually a different Overlord and the events of the games never took place at least in this reality. Also The Abyss is what the Overlord and Minions call Tartarus.
2. See 1. above
3. What do you think the Infernal Armor is for? It's to summon Wraiths from the deeper levels of Tartaus.
4. He does have access to that branch of magic, sadly, the needed stones are still missing.
5. As for the Grandness of the War, well, You'll have to wait and see.
6. As for the Hive Queen, she might be making an apperance though i expect she will be turned into a mindless drone if she tries to put the moves on the Overlord.
Meta issues:
You're are correct about the meta, but i do have an explanation for that. The Overlord has, through very intense magical training, gained the ability to see POSSIBLE futures. Now that doesn't mean its concentrate or anything but he plans accordingly to the most likely future to happen. I thought it was mentioned in some chapters ago but then again, i might have accidentally deleted it when i was editing.
Again, thanks for the review and for the defense.
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I can understand why some people might take some things seriously, but this story is being written for fun. And some of the complaints seemed to have been based off misconceptions from what I can tell. Not pointing fingers, not trying to start a war. Unless I'm helping the Overlord wage war on Equestria, but I can do that once these other minions get out of the pit.
All fair answers. I didn't think about the fact your story might not include the events of the games, which makes sense for the story as it's earth and not the lands of the Overlord. I think I just assumed that it would be included, so that fault is mine. And I never even considered that the Infernal Armor would be utilized for controlling and summoning the Wraiths, I might have missed a memo somewhere.
When I read your comment on Chrysalis, all I could hear was Gnarl's voice. "She's called the Hive Queen, eh? When she isn't fighting and dying for you, Sire, could we stick her with the Minion Hives? Maybe she can figure out what's causing that smell from the Green Hive."
And the Meta:
That is a good point, plus having the Tower Heart always growing stronger with him, that would make complete sense in that now that he is immortal, corruptly evil, and back in business, his very power escalating to new heights.
And no prob, figured a detailed thoughts and breakdown of your story so far might be a nice change.
Celestia has a domination fetish? Kinky.
4764432 Trust me, that will be explained...when Life stops trying to shove Lemons down my throat.
Is this a crossover with other LoHAV fics, or what?
4768762 Uhhh....wut?
4769085 Sadly no Quaver. BUT! A pony we all love to hate will take the place of the Jester...once its time.
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A new jester? Poor Gnarl will have a fit.
At least the minions won't have to worry about sharing the burrows.
"That's the new jester? No room in burrows for that thing. It can find own pit." "Let's tie moo cow bell to new jester, so we hear them coming." "Think Gnarl string them up for crows?" "No crows in Netherworld, stupid." - Idle conversation between minions, because why the hell not. XD couldn't help myself.
Oh, and Dragonlover553 is referring to the groups listed up above: League of Humans Acting Villainous (LoHAV). ^_^
4745844 The man may be an evil tyrant Hell-bent on dominating everything in Creation, but he does treat the women in his life rather well. Especially if they're into S&M, which is apparently the case with Celestia.
Nice pic by the way. Where's it from?
You may want to go back over the last chapter. I think you mistyped a few things regarding what should be bolded.
4772276 FINALLY! I was waiting for someone to get that joke!
4772750 Huh? *Checks chapter.* Oh Damn it! I must have bumped the code line for the bold when i was editing it!
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Look. If my old girlfriend broke my heart and hurt my friends and has been actively trying to blow up or enslave my country, then she somehow sneaks into my dreamscape and ties me up to engage in s&m...that's sexual assault. Actual sex should involve consent. Not tying someone up when they're helpless. It just makes Celestia look weak and, well...slutty. And the Overlord like a hypocrite for engaging in the very thing he, just a few chapters ago, decried. And we aren't supposed to take this as a violation or something horrifying, that's what bothered me the most. This is supposed to be a GOOD thing from how it was written. No. It's not.
And the art was done by Ed McGuinness.
4774027 Two words man: Dream sequence.
This is Celestia's dream and, if what Luna said is true, then she's been having dreams like this for a long time. The Overlord may have had a direct hand in this particular instance, but the fact remains he doesn't need to do anything for her to have these dreams.
For Celestia, the Overlord is the bad boy in her life. She may be against everything he stands for and willing to engage him in mortal combat, but in the end she's still attracted to him on some level and wants to be with him. Her perverted fantasy is to be in a situation where she can be dominated by the Overlord and give in without having to worry about the rest of the world and what he would do to it, and it shows.
In the dream he doesn't do anything truly evil; all he does is tease Celestia in typical S&M fashion. She's dreaming of a what could be a reformed Overlord, instead of the tyrant she so vehemently opposes.
To put it bluntly, she wants to be in that kind of situation. It will, in all likelihood, probably never happen, but people tend to want what they can't have and damn does Celestia want this.
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That doesn't make sense. There's no indication she was attracted to him or him to her in the earlier chapters. No build up or foreshadowing. Nor even any real elaboration on the aforementioned dreams Luna talked about. This just pops out of nowhere. You can't DO that.
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No signs of the emotions before the dream?
Would her anger expressed towards the Overlord, the whole situation, and particularly even going so far as to fire a shot at Luna for mentioning the dreams not count towards this? That wasn't just anger at his return, if I read it correctly, then it was also frustration of a conflict of feelings. Think about it: Angry that he broke free, frustrated because you now teeter between defending your lands as the ruler or fall to the alliances of the past and join/rejoin the Overlord, trying to hide these facts from not only the Mane 6 but Discord as well. It sounds plausible to me that this could be the case.
I said this in my last comment but I think it needs restating:
-THERE WAS NO MENTION OF THE OVERLORD INFLUENCING THAT DREAM! SHE HAS HAD SIMILAR DREAMS EVEN WHILE HE WAS TRAPPED IN THE CRYSTAL!-
None what so ever. Yes, he appeared in the dream, but there was no mention of magic manipulating that dream. He has no way to even manipulate her dream like that, dream magic a power that is solely controlled by Luna. No Overlord standing over her and making it happen. Luna mentioned the dreams in the previous chapter, putting 2 and 2 together means that these are residual feelings from the time prior to his imprisonment.
And if you also missed it, the Overlord (and even the minions) hate -rape-! If that is the case, why would he inflict that dream? No, that was all her, no one else. Period. Not Luna, Not the Overlord, Not Discord, Not Twilight, Not Gnarl, and most certainly not poor Vinyl (though that was funny that she brought it to an end).
The Overlord had nothing to do with that dream, those have been happening even during his imprisonment where he could not affect the world. It was written as a good thing because it is implied that before the Overlord's imprisonment that she loved him. Had a thing for him. Meaning she had and has had wet dreams about him. Why did it start with her terrified? Because she knows what destruction he is capable of and her first reaction is to stop him after a millenia or so of defending and ruling her kingdom. But the underlying feelings remain, simple as that.
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Jeez, all this gripe over a wet dream that Celestia had.
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But there WERE no alliances of the past. The overlord himself never once mentions such a thing happened. You're hinging all that on something that had no foreshadowing and no hint beyond ONE thing which still wasn't enough to imply she had feelings. For all we knew, she was dreaming about him torturing her and having it brought up is personal and hurtful. Or she was angry because she wanted to finish him off but stayed her hand, and now feels guilty.
4775134 Did you actually read the previous chapters? If so, then you apparently missed the part where Luna mentions that Celestia has dreams of the Overlord, and that she is very embarassed about them.
The actual content of these dreams is never stated outright, aside from the above of course, but Luna's playful teasing and Celestia's reaction implies that Celestia does have some feelings for the Overlord, even if they are purely physical in nature, and that they may have had a relationship at some point in the distant past.
The fact that this pops up now just furthers the argument that Celestia wants to get into the Overlord's greaves.
So yes there is foreshadowing, yes there is evidence, and yes, you CAN do that.
4775386 I'm glad someone gets it.
Okay, listen up! To all those who don't like how i write, GET THE BUCK OVER IT! I write what i want, how i want and when i want! I don't pander to your views of Reality, know why? BECAUSE IT IS BLOODY BORING~! THIS! IS! [b]FANFICTION! (Heh, 300 meme right there.) NO MATTER WHAT YOU SAY, NO MATTER WHAT YOU DO, I WILL NOT STOP DOING WHAT I LOVE AND THAT IS WRITING SIMPLY BECAUSE YOU CAN'T HANDLE IT! SO STOP YOUR WHINING YOU BASEMENT TROLLS, HARDCORE BRONIES AND OTHERS! JUST GET! OUT! OF! HERE!
4769426 I mean, is the protagonist yours(and that includes someone with the powers and looks of someone who isn't yours), or do they belong to another author?
4778429 Well, the armor of the overlord and some spells belongs to other people, but the body inside the armor belongs to me since the company that made Overlord never really gave a clue as to what the overlord looks like without the armor.
4779176 ah. So he's an original character with someone else's powers, right?
4786825 In a nutshell, yes.
4788600 ah. Then I'll read it.
4792157 As i told Dribble, The Overlord has the ability to see POSSIBLE futures and he plans for the most likely one to happen. So, he manipulated the situation that was more likely to happen to gain Gilda's Loyalty.
4745937 First off that was a dream. It was mentioned a few times it was a dream. Quite a few, next if it was her dream, then unless Luna or the overlord is messing with her head, that was all her and what she wants. It's actually a common fetish given to Celestia. Third... no that's all I got, he didn't do anything, Celestia likes being dominated. See ya.
4769428 Is it Blueblood? I bet it's Blueblood. I hope it's Blueblood. I mean I really hope it's Blueblood, especially if Gnarl happens to need something to pummel in a corner. So here to hoping its Blueballs--I mean blood. To Blueballs!
4745937 it was a dream