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WinterPony


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Winter Chill lives a boring life as a king, but when a beautiful stallion comes to the Ice Kingdom, things will change forever. Decisions will be made, love will be declared, you will cry, you will laugh, you will enjoy!

Rated teen for some alcohol and minor (non-descriptive) prostitution.

This story is my first true piece i am proud of and it will be released one chapter at a time.
A special thanks to Kay Elle Wyatt and Scout feather for reading this before hand

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 18 )

4097811 well Thankyou for using harsh words to tell me to work on character development. I love it when people think "constructive criticism" means being hurtful and cursing

4097868 this is actually a really hard worked rewrite, from when all I wanted was a post. originally each chapter had 500 words and there was no character development. Me and my friends spent hours on google docs sending comments till they thought it was worthy. I'm starting to think I should just give up already

I could like this. Good OC stories are hard to come by. good job:yay:

4097908 Thankyou! Chapter two coming soon!!!

I love gay fimfics...
I love OC story's...
So I can already tell that I will like this..
Good Job. Keep up the good work :pinkiehappy:

the detail is better but it seems mire like you're simply listing off background traits as opposed to useing them with timing and purpose. this can make the passage feel very, for a lack of better term, shallow and meaningless. work to make it flow better.

4100238 okay, i'll work on that in the future!

4123983 Not sure if you hate OC fics or like them....

"You are to find and return with a pony named Arch Angel. He is deep purple with an orange mane, and has a gold wing for a cutie mark. I believe he must still be in the kingdom, but check the outskirts too."

Wow okay desperate.

I like this a lot because I do
If only the chapters weren't so damned short ;p

4194428 They're short, but there will be 10-15. And yes, Winter is very desperate, and you'll see how far he goes for Arch...

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