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Dableaxcheaz


Welcome! CAUSE, I NEVER LOOKED BEHIND, I NEVER TRIED TO FIND! SOMETHING THAT COULD HAVE MADE ME ONE!!! SOMETHING THAT I COULD REACH THE SUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUN!!!!

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Applebloom awaits the return of her family. Big Mac and GrannySmith return, but Applejack hasn't. The family has grown worried, what has become of the honest mare? but more importantly, can the family face the facts?

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Comments ( 11 )

Welp I don't need to read the story now.

4080216 oops. I forgot that the description spoiled it. sorry about that :fluttershysad:

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It's alright. Next time give us a little information about the story in the description, not the whole thing.

Good luck in your future works!:yay:

very good job. There were a few spelling and grammer errors but that's all I really saw wrong with it. The story made me feel the way I did when I lost my dad to cancer... Good luck with the rest of your stories :pinkiehappy:

Some grammar problems, the story line kinda shaky, and a few capitalization errors too, and that is part of grammar, I know that.:ajbemused: Overall, this story was great. Keep writing, this is great!:pinkiehappy:

4124140 Yeah, I felt that this fic was a bit unfinished, I could have done better. I wrote this for EQD's Writer's Training grounds, and I had 5 days to submit it, plus i had school on my back. I might rewrite this, but I've got plans. Thanks for the feed back:heart:

Aside from a few grammatical errors, I liked it :twilightsmile: Never stop writing.

" Applebloom pulled her head out all teary eyed."And besides, what good would killing the chimera do? It's not gonna bring Applejack back, I'm sorry." "

To stop it from killing other ponies.

7832039 Well, I appreciate the praise but this little scrap isn't much from what I'm doing now. Strange how I'm coming back to this after almost three years since I wrote it in the span of a week using a broken key board (do mind the errors, I was sleep deprived at the time.) This is nothing. Ever since I've moved on from fan-fiction last year I've written a 50,000 word novel based on the Season five premiere set in the 1960's. And in this year I've written a full length novel that's about 136,000 words long, all I've got to do is polish it and it can go up. I do give this story one thing, it was the start of something I love to do, when every place is just a mad mad mad mad world. Glad you enjoyed it, that's very nice for me to hear on New Year's Eve. :pinkiesad2:

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