Epilogue
Shadows of Canterlot
by Prane
Epilogue
The night was getting deeper and the sky was blackening when the scarred stallion joined a green pegasus mare on the balcony overlooking Canterlot. She was standing there alone and just gazed upon the city, smiling every time she saw a light fading away from the windows below. The stallion slowed down halfway, uncertain whether he chose the right time to interrupt. He took a deep breath, approached the mare and kneeled beside her.
‘We retrieved the gem, but Celestia is still alive.’, he said, then lifted his head. ‘Your plan has failed, mistress.’
‘Au contraire, my dear.’, the mare replied in a calm voice, showing the stallion to stand up. ‘Everything went just as I have expected.’
‘But, the princess…’
‘Killing an alicorn never solves the problem.’, she interrupted. ‘Besides, we are not barbaric, are we?’
The stallion went away a few steps and pondered. He watched the mare spreading and folding her wings to exercise them, then looking beyond the ivory balustrade. He turned around as he realized the truth.
‘You expected my acolyte to fail?’, the scarred stallion walked back towards the mare. ‘You were only interested in the gem, weren’t you!?’, he said, raising his voice. ‘You should have told me…’
‘I told you everything you had to know, Zaeer!’, she shouted angrily, immediately silencing the stallion.
He grimaced with confusion and disbelief.
‘Cheer up.’, the mare added after a while, pointing her hoof at the place beside her, to which the stallion trotted. ‘We have achieved a major victory tonight. Merci a vous…’, she said turning her head back.
A dark grey unicorn emerged from the shadows of Canterlot and stood by her side.
‘…my loyal Moonwarden.’
The mare burst into a terrible laughter, shattering the serenity of the night.
Which was no longer peaceful.
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So this is it.
I hope you all found reading my story worthwhile. Feel free to express your satisfaction/dissatisfaction in coments!
MOONWARDEN?!! WHAT THE BUCK?!!
THAT NO GOOD TRAITOR!!
I was right. I should have known the earth pony was Scarface. And just when Trixie was starting to believe in trust. So, what happens next?
The lack of articles (a, the, an, and so forth), as well as frequent slipping into present tense in narration, made this pretty painful to read.
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Although this story has some good ideas (I think!), the general execution (grammar, wording, articles etc.) is terrible.
Gah, tell me about it.
But, what can you do. Those were my very first steps into the world of writing stories, after all. I can only hope that I've learned something since then.
4500142 Indeed, I think you rather have.
A bit odd that my story-reading led me to this one after your later and better works, but there it is.
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Heh, I'm surprised you've even found this story. It's an oldie (almost 3 years, whoa!) which I don't think I'll ever revise, so expect more rushed scenes and general issues with it. After that you're welcome to check out some better executed stories of mine.
And the end. I suppose I'll read the sequel later today.
Don't be too freaked if your system notification window shows you have 10+ new comments on two several years old stories. That's just what I do, comment chapter by chapter (unless they're really freaking small chapters, anyways...)