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Eager Eye's got a major problem at Pinkie Pie's Candy and Pastry Factory. The orders of cupcakes just continue to pile in, and while his team is usually pretty good at filling them, the inefficiencies of their process is starting to show. Eager's going to have to figure out how to get the assembly line back on track, or he will risk losing the first job he's ever had.

This started as a writing challenge and as a punishment for missing this week's WTG (and every one before then, for that matter). I gave myself three hours to write a 2,000 word story with the topic "Pinkie Pie starts a massive corporation". Then after three hours had passed, I had about 3,600 words in front of me and was still going strong. So rather than try and cram what I had into the parameters of the challenge, I decided to just keep on going.

~~~Criticism is welcome and appreciated~~~

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The writing is technically very good, but 2400 words in, there's still no hook.

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