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shakes head. this sotry is typically fairly good, but the last two chapters....... shakes head again.
a, I am disappointed we did nto get any sexy smexy details with it all.
but b is the Luna would have, more than likely, directly attacked the fake cadence. eposed her where she stood to the world. saying that she could nto match chrysalis is foolish as well, as the changeling queen, while power, even more so thanks to the stolen love, is no true mage. her powers are limited because her eduction is limited. even then she could not match both sisters, as celestia would rapidly come to her aid.
the reason why luna was not present during all of that could have been done much better is all I am saying. it just dods not make sense and it is out of character otherwise.
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Trust me, all will be revealed in time. We're moving into a rather personal and enjoyable bit of the story next, where Fleur begins exploring her exhibitionist streak. Afterwards, there will be on final arc of the story, ending on a rather heartfelt and personal note.
Trust me. The next three chapters will be almost nothing but smut.
Since it seems that's all you're reading for anymore.
I, for one, enjoyed this lovely tender moment between these two. What can I say, I like a little plot with my plot. Plus now we finally know where Luna was during the wedding!
4059861 I'm immensely enjoying your characterization of Luna. I feel like her precautions are justified; if you had spent a thousand years alone, and everyone you knew but the person who had imprisoned you was dead, what lengths would you go to to protect the one person you've come to love?
"exhibitionist streak" yummi
well i like the emotional parts of the story more Loyal ...
edit: do you reveal why Luna is so 'over' protective ?
4059861 Loyal we both know that only thing your good at is writing smut. Stick to what your good at.
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Hey! I resemble that remark!
Though yes, I'm very curious as to why Luna decided to hide away with Fleur instead of trying to interrupt Chrysalis' plan, alert Celestia, plan a trap for the the fake Cadance, etc.
..Ok, massive deleted thread..
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Was a big back-and-forth between myself and a dissatisfied fan.
I deleted it because A. Spoilers and B. You don't need to see that childish shit.
I enjoy these small breaks from the smut. It allows for progression of story, and make the smut scenes more personal. If it was all smut (like many other stories) it would feel hollow and a bit dull. Keep up the good balance Loyal.
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THIS GUY FUCKING GETS IT.
This chapter was great and loved how you tied it in within cannon. Can't wait till the next chapter!
This story is great so far. Best princess shipped with sexiest socialite, one point. Well-written, a second point. Not completely clop, a third. BDSM, which I find to be kinda hot, a fourth. Fleur dumping the asshat that is Fancy Pants, a fifth of five possible points. This has been rated an excellent story by me, but my ratings mean nothing to anyone. this story, though. Liked and faved.
4059861 let me put it in a more mild way then
a, i like that it is an actual story. the no smexy thing was a joke.
B. i simply question her portrayal in all of that. maybe i am simply speaking before i get information, but i cannot imagine a scenario where luna would see chrysalis and not kick her through a wall. she has a lot of personal baggage when it comes to her kingdom and her sister after all.
maybe you can convince me, maybe not. we will see.
4075913 but... But... What if I want to read that childish shit? :(
Anyway, as people have said before your character development is just masterfully done and it adds gravity to the clop. Please keep writing forever :D
Wow, there were some buttholes here, weren't there? xD It's okay though, because most of us are genuinly enjoying your writing. I won't deny it, I came for the smut, but stayed for the story. Great job!
Like in the last chapter, some of this knowledge breaks the events of the show and makes Luna seem more like an idiot.
So much for the whole "protecting their ponies" like the old days. Luna is being inconsistent with her original portraying.
But like the genius she is, she neglected to inform her sister it seems.
I was a little disappointed with Luna in this. She acts with too much fear and little forethought.
I feel like this chapter was probably the weakest of the story so far. Plot wise it was vital and important it's just I do agree with some of the others that Lunas knowledge Counteracts Celestias surprise and the guards lack of action or co-ordination in the actual episode and feels like a rather hefty plot-hole in an otherwise Excellently crafted narrative.
That said story is not done, So we shall see what happens next.
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Very late reply but i feel it needs to be said.
To play the devil's advocate, fear and love can cloud even the brightest and hardiest of minds on their own. So imagine what happens when those two feelings are combined. I'd say that, while it wasn't the most logical thing to do, i can definetly understand her mindset during this and the last couple of chapters.