*Note* This is my first fan fiction. I hope you like it and I will be glad to receive some feedback and constructive criticism. Thank you *Note ended*
A mysterious entity by the name of Dako rose from what the princesses thought to be his final resting place. But this sorcerer of black magic is willing to do whatever it takes to plague all of Equestria in an unrelenting darkness, enslaving everypony and bending the world to his needs and desires. But two young, love struck mares--with the help of the well known and respected Guardians of Harmony--with the power to stop this force are faced with various obstacles and challenges. Can they defeat Dako in this daring attempt?
Chapters (1)
So my first instalment. I liked it. I want to hear what you guys think. Thank you
I'm not sure if this is an intentional pun or something, but in your Chapter 1 title, you misspelt "Beginnings".
*Staring. You have a few basic mistakes littered throughout the story, but nothing another read-through couldn't fix! Aside from that, there are some pretty cute scenes in here!
3437486 Thanks, I know, not the best with grammar or spelling. Used word for everything but the title hence the misspelling, thanks for pointing it out
3437510 No problem! Like I said, you've managed to get some pretty nice characterisation going with Amber and Lux, so keep up the good work! I'm away from home at the moment, but if you ever want a hand with proofing or suchlike, I'd be happy to help c:
3437520 Thanks, it's appreciated, I'm glad you like my characterisation, was terribly difficult for me, got a few tips and ideas from Ijab though. Thanks.
This is nice, I'd like to see what happens!