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....wow me gusta
Hilarious.
Geezas!
22297 Geezas Criesed! This one is gonna get interesting!
.........Yet I still have the urge to read.
"Cocks are awesome! "
Great read. Now to finish the entire damn series!
Rainbow Dash yelling cocks are awesome. Somehow I can picture that.
Very interesting to say the least. This sounds like its going to be a bit dirtier then the shipping I'm used to reading, but I'm willing to give it a shot.
At first the present tense annoyed me, but I couldn't even notice by the time I got to the fifth paragraph. Looks like an awesome fic so far
I thought this story would be good but after reading the first chapter I decided Im not going any further. Luna won't date Twilight because of inexperience? She wants her to lose her virginity first? That is the most shallow thing I've ever heard, trying to deny her a relationship for such a superficial, insignificant reason. If you like somepony you aren't supposed to care how many others they've kissed or slept with. Virginity is a rarity to find and people treat it like a blight to remove, and now that pigheaded ideology has leaked into pony fiction. Fuck this author.
37044 Insults SOmeone for Writing something many people enjoy. Oh You're Cool
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Well fuck you! Not real, moron. Besides, can you really blame a mare that is over a millennium old for wanting a young fillyfriend to have a bit more experience in love?and to be honest, it's for the best. My past experiences in dating have on multiple occasions prevented me from fucking up my relationship. So take your "superior" morals and shove them where Celestia's sun doesn't shine. Go read Brave New World by Huxley and then tell me how you like your morals.
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everyone deserves a bit of kindness. Saying what one believes takes guts, even on the WWW. Don't get mad at someone just because they have a diffrent oppion then you, but see it for what it is.
Love the story so far, can't wait to read more!
Ohh! forgot to say that I love your dialoge! (my spelling is atrosciss sorry)
It really seemed to fit the characters and moved the story along in such a delightful way.
Wow this is soo cool :3. So fa i love it also 56381 where celestis sun doesnt shine?? i literaly Lold at that
""There's something on my face: ... It. Was. Pain!""
This is quite well written and aside from the present tense being annoying at first (I barely noticed it past the second paragraph) I enjoyed the story especially the parts where:
“I'm like, the best lover in Equestria! Of course The Dash could teach you a thing or two.” (Rather Cocky wouldn't you say?)
Then:
“Who says you have to choose?” (Dash you were always going to turn out Bi weren't you?)
Then:
“It seems logical. Scientific. And Luna said I needed to understand romance. So I need to study both sides.” (You go girl!)
Then:
“Why does everypony always think I'm gay?!” "Cocks are awesome!”
And finally:
“Ah, that one. that one is, ahh...Fluttershy's.” (It's Always the quite ones ... Always.)
The only mistake which strikes out to me is this miswording:
"I have an idea. What right here a moment.” Rarity excuses herself and disappears upstairs" I am assuming that it is supposed to be "Wait".
37044 well fuck you too! ever heard of love and tolerance? calm the hell down. if you dont like it, dont rant about it and then diss the author. GTFO please
on another note, i loled at dashie yelling out cocks, i didnt think of rainbow dash being a pervert . gonna keep reading cuz i think this is gonna get interesting
I think more stories should have Rarity and Rainbow Dash doing some back-and-forth dialogue, because I haven't laughed that hard in a while.
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Dude, seriously....
If you'd read the rest of the story, you'd find the REAL REASON for it....
What the hell? How did a Twiluna story escape my radar? I will not stand for this!
Unless Luna is playing matchmaker to lead Twilight to her "true" love. Which is still unacceptable for me to have not read but would explain why I have not seen it.
oh man, not even done yet but I'm already rolling at the exchanges between RD and Rarity
"Now we're talkin'! This is gonna be good.” Rainbow Dash blurts out. Rarity thinks the same thing, but just arches her eyebrows.
“Well...” Twilight hesitantly begins. Her two friends are completely focused on her, staring. She hesitates again.
When you tell us what somebody thinks, even though there's no way to know that from just observing, you're entering their viewpoint, even if you're writing in third person. Third person limited is when you write third person but stick with one person's viewpoint. When you switch rapidly back and forth between multiple viewpoints, like in the passage above (Rarity, then Twilight), it's called fully-omniscient third person. This was common in the 19th century, but is out of fashion now. It's difficult to use in a story that has a single central character, as this one does, because you spend long periods of time in that character's POV, then suddenly get shuttlecocked back and forth between POVs in a scene, then settle back down to the main character's POV again.
I love that you chose RBD and Rarity as the two to give Twilight the birds-and-bees talk. Perfect choice. Dash's directness - "Do you clop to mares?" - and Rarity's re-interpretations - are comedy gold.
Dis gone be gud
This should get interesting...
hahaha
This is now #1 on my list of funniest books i have ever read. Right behind it is Lunaughty and right behind that is Exposed. Read both of them if you haven't already. As for Exposed well.......... Lets just say i have a very, very DARK sense of humor..... Enjoy my friends.....
This is fucking great
Every...day...
Seems like Rainbow and I have something in common now.
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I agree that it's superficial andshouldn't be treated like a blight, but that's no reason to hate on the author.
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"can you really blame a mare that is over a millennium old for wanting a young fillyfriend to have a bit more experience in love"
Then why would Luna not teach her herself? Part of a loving relationship is learning that sort of stuff with eachother. And that's not 'love', you're talking about sex.
Wow, this is... pretty good. Going to read all day and finish it all on my plane ride tomorrow.
All I could think of when dash said, "this is gonna be good" was...
Dis is gun b gud.
0_0 what did i just read??
great story, and unlike the other stories i've read you'rs actually has great grammar. and i really like how you've keeped the character's personality besides all the clopping they were talking about most of the time. i'm going to keep reading to see what happens next! cant wait!
I was skeptical, at first. Then I read the SB interview, about the part where the author writes an arbitrary phrase, and then modifies it to make it compatible with the dialects of all the mane 6. I thought to myself, "That's silly," but then I read "Whoa. WHOA. She wants you to get laid? Nice.", as well as the rest of the RD/Rarity back and forth. Top notch writing, bro. The initial setting/paragraph kinda threw me for a loop, especialy the present tense thing, but I got over it. Throughout the first half of the chapter, I felt myself repeating the idiom, "Well, that escalated quickly." And every time I found the phrase applicable, it got more amusing. I like this story.
Nice start, let's see how it all goes from here
wow! great chapter, I can't wait to read more.
"Cocks are awesome! "
Oh boy.
Um, Luna, do you even know who you're talking to? Do you have any idea? Any idea who she is?
This is Twilight Sparkle we're talking about. She takes her research seriously. This thing you've just unleashed on an unsuspecting little town...
Ponyville is going to be so screwed. Literally.
P.S. Haters gonna hate. Never you mind, author, this is still going to be interesting...
I am loving RD in here, I was laughing a little too hard at some of the things she said lol
I had to just stop reading and roar with laughter for about a minute.
haha this will be good
once you clop, you never stop...
This has got to be the funniest that I have ever seen Rainbow acting in a story. I can tell that this is going to be quite the interesting story. I can't wait for all of the awaiting hilarity.
Winter wrap-up winter wrap-up! Let's finish our holiday cheer!
"Aqua," "teal," or "blue-green" are all valid choices. I'm sure Rarity has got some color name that specifically describes the exact color of Luna's eyes, but you'll be fine with something not quite so precise.
I can only assume that Luna is used to being intimidating. I expect she has had to coax ponies into admitting their inappropriate feelings more often than not.
When did your sister's cake habit become relevant?
I can't even muster up the will to tell myself I ought to be ashamed. It's sad. I ought to think I should be ashamed.
One of the great mysteries of the universe: why is "consort" so much better as a past participle than it is in any other tense?
Silly Dashie. Don't you know that gods, Spitfire (seriously, does anybody but me even remember what I'm talking about anymore?), and David Bowie (do I even remember?) transcend gender? The only uncertainty is whether Bowie is the human version of Spitfire, or Spitfire is the pony version of Bowie.
Once, maybe a month or two ago, I was wandering through FIMFiction and came to this story. And right about here is where I asked myself, "what am I doing here?" and, upon receiving a noncommittal response, promptly departed. But then I determined that Cold in Gardez had written a sequel to this, and that certainly qualifies as a reason to put aside my affected aversion to the combination of the "mature" and "sex" tags. So you get a second chance, this time with me judging properly.
. . . Actually, the needle's swung the other way entirely. This could be what Spiderses would be if it took itself seriously and was 185,000 words long, and I would still read it in its entirety (that's not an invitation to have written this badly, by the way), since I'm too much of a context snob to skip straight to a sequel and I can't not read something by Gardez. The worst I could do is question Gardez's taste. But don't make me need to.
Well narrated.
EDIT:
I didn't realize Twilight was in a position to see that; I thought Luna was facing towards her.
Trust me, it was absolutely essential that I say that. Just take my word for it.
...Yeah, this is gonna be good.
"Cocks are awesome!" Rainbow Dash yells.
Whelp.... that happened. Also I can relate with Twilight. Novels? I spend so much time with my textbooks that I forget there are other books. Though to be fair, novels aren't really 'books'. Texts are filled with knowledge and information, things that make the universe real. A good physics text book can kick the ass of a dirty novel any day. Now if you'll excuse me, I'm going to continue reading fanfiction about colorful ponies.
Woah this is pretty well written, the dialogues really got the characters'... characters.
3428220 that was a troll
I'm a bit late to the punch, but as long as everypony's being honest here... I was actually expecting Rarity to come down the stairs with sex toys. There' something horribly wrong with me.
2146258 I can't believe that nopony guessed why she being weird that scene.