• Member Since 20th Aug, 2013
  • offline last seen Jul 8th, 2018

MLP Moth


A short-story I decided to write. She finds some curious creatures and gets on board their ship. Luna speaks to them about the Equestria.

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Luna was banished in the moon, meaning becoming a part of it. So she couldn't sit on its' surface

Meh. Well, I didn't really care about the logic. I got really bored and wrote this story out of random. Thanks for the feedback though.

I like the dialogue but it needs some direction to it. By that I mean, occasionally toss in "Said Luna with a sense of pride" or some kind of descriptor, instead of just giving us the dialogue. I know it doesn't seem like much, but it really does add to the picture we create in our heads concerning to the story.

I will, thanks

thanks for posting in my group. :trollestia:

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