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Luna on the Moon

A short-story I decided to write. She finds some curious creatures and gets on board their ship. Luna speaks to them about the Equestria.

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Anyne

Anyne #1 · Dec 31st, 2013 · · ·

Luna was banished in the moon, meaning becoming a part of it. So she couldn't sit on its' surface

MLP Moth

MLP Moth #2 · Dec 31st, 2013 · 1 · ·

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Meh. Well, I didn't really care about the logic. I got really bored and wrote this story out of random. Thanks for the feedback though.

Bateman66

Bateman66 #3 · Jan 5th, 2014 · · ·

I like the dialogue but it needs some direction to it. By that I mean, occasionally toss in "Said Luna with a sense of pride" or some kind of descriptor, instead of just giving us the dialogue. I know it doesn't seem like much, but it really does add to the picture we create in our heads concerning to the story.

MLP Moth