The room was as long as it was wide, stretching on for almost five hundred meters, before abruptly transitioning into a wall, completing the perfect cube that the designers of the room had strove to create at its inception.
Spread throughout the room were hundreds, if not thousands, of small, crib like structures, each one holding a single infant child.
Each one of these children were potential candidates, and would be subjected to small tests by one of the five creatures walking between each one of the cribs.
Occasionally, one of the creatures would stop by a crib, turning and facing the child that lay within. Even more rarely, they would pick up the child, holding two fingers against the side of the infants head for a moment, before either replacing it in the crib and moving on, or removing the baby to a cordoned off part of the room, before continuing on their search once more.
Slowly, one of the creatures picked up a small wookie nestled within one of the cribs, and placed his fingers against the child’s temples as he had done with the other potential candidates that day. After a few brief seconds of consideration, he transferred his hands to the waist of the Wookie, cradling the baby in his arms, before walking over to the side of the room, where three more similar creatures awaited, watching over the children that had already been picked out.
“A Wookie? Are you sure Marcus?” One of the females asked, looking quizzically at the new arrival.
“The force is impartial to species Varnk.” The male identified as Marcus said, placing the tiny wookie down in a small play pen with three other chosen babies. “Master Frout can attest to that.”
“Yes, members of my species are rarely force sensitive.” The red skinned male mused.
“It’s not that Devaronians aren’t force sensitive.” the final Jedi spoke, his voice ringing out with a mechanical grating sound, and his face hidden by the hood of his cloak, “Males never seem to be able to stay still for more than a few months at a time, and females are almost universally stubborn when it comes to moving from where they have laid their roots.”
“As always, your insight is most welcome master Norik.” The Devaronian bowed, before casting his gaze upon the children behind them. “That was the last potential no?”
“It was.” Agreed Marcus, sighing as he looked over the room. “By the force. The number we select seems to shrink every time I oversee the proceedings.”
“Maybe you’re missing some in your advanced age?” Varnk smiled.
“Laugh it up. You’ll get to my age one day.” Marcus shot back. “Are we ready to go?”
“I believe so. Norik, Frout, are you ready?”
“If this is it.” Frout frowned, picking up a small Twilek and smiling down at it.
“It’s really creepy when you smile like that.” Marcus smirked, picking the Wookie back up.
“Wait.” Norik commanded, holding up a hand.” I sense something is about to happen.”
The three other Jedi looked at each other, before back at Norik.
“I can’t sense anything.” Frout said slowly.
“No, I can sense it to.” Marcus said, putting his hand to his head as if he was suffering from a headache.
No sooner had he uttered the words, then the thing they had sensed arrived. In the centre of the room, a glowing sphere of light appeared, spreading out and encompassing all the cribs around it in its glorious light.
In an instant, the Jedi had placed the children back down in the play pen, and had set off towards the light, Norik summoning his Lightsaber hilt from its position on his belt, holding the weapon tightly, but not activating it yet.
Slowly, the light began to fade, and the four masters approached its epicentre, their eyes alighting on a small crater that had been formed in the floor, and more importantly, the tiny creature that lay within.
“Norik, what do you make of this?” Varnk asked, slowly sinking to one knee and placing her hand palm down over the small green and purple creature.
“I’ve never seen anything like it.” The Jedi said, throwing back his hood and revealing his face, and the mass of cybernetics that lay beneath it.
“So this is a new species?” Frout asked.
“Brilliant. A new species, which may or may not be sentient, and the first thing it sees is a devil and a cyborg.” Marcus laughed.
“Don’t forget a sarcastic, narcissistic idiot of a human.” Varnk shot back with a grin.
“Touché.” He laughed. “Anything?”
“Whatever it is, it’s alive. In seems to be in some sort of coma though.” Varnk said, removing her hand.
“You can sense that though, yes?” Norik asked.
“You seem to be much more in tune with the living force today.” Frout observed. “What do you sense?”
“This creature is a child, perhaps between five to six galactic years in age. That means he is within the more extreme boundary of the age for training.” He explained.
“Ok, and?” Marcus prompted.
“And surely you can sense the potential that he holds?” Norik continued.
Thinking quickly, Marcus placed his hand directly on the creatures head, and closed his eyes, as the small creatures eyes cracked open.
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Spike slowly cracked his eyes open, groaning in pain as he tried to raise his right arm slightly, and dislodged what felt like small pieces of debris from it.
Eventually, his vision began to actually focus, and he looked around, staring at the odd shapes of several bipeds.
“Twilight?” He groaned. “Why are there Minotaur’s or Diamond Dogs here?”
One of the creatures spoke something in an unintelligible slur, and snapped Spike out of his stupor.
His eyes finally came into full focus, locking onto the creature that spoke. Instantly, he was on edge, scrambling about and managing to get out of the crater he found himself in.
Edging backwards, he felt himself touch a set of legs, and craned his head back until he was looking directly upwards, and looking straight at another creature, this one sporting bright red skin and a set of horns.
“Buh…ah…wha” Spike stammered, freezing up as the creature looked down at him.
The red creature opened its mouth, and spewed out more of the unintelligible sounds that the other creature had made.
Spike slowly pushed himself away from the four creatures, backing up until he hit a wall. The four creatures advanced towards him, one of them brandishing a strange tube in its hand.
Spike tried to speak again, but found himself unable to make a sound.
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The four Jedi looked at the odd creature as it backed up against the wall, clearly terrified of its new surroundings.
“I believe it would be best if we sought to comfort this creature.” Norik said, re-attaching his Lightsaber to his belt.
“Well it mumbled something when it first woke, but I couldn’t hear if it was any known language.” Marcus mused.
“Perhaps if we could get it to speak again, one of us may have heard the language before. We do know the majority of the galactic languages between us.” Varnk suggested.
“That could be possible.” Frout agreed, before turning to spike.
“Hello, do you understand me?” He said slowly in normal galactic basic.
The small creature didn’t move a muscle, his eyes staying glued onto the four Jedi.
“Do you understand us?” Norik asked, slipping easily into the language of Selkath.
The result was once again the same, and the Jedi broke into a variety of different languages.
“How is this?” perfect Shyriiwook, no response.
“This?” Dosh, no response.
“Bothese?” Still nothing.
“This is ridiculous.” Frout exasperated, slipping into his mother tongue.
Spike suddenly focused on the red skinned alien, before opening his mouth to speak.
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Spike watched as the creatures in front of him all made unintelligible sounds, varying from odd mumbles to growls and barking noises.
Finally however, the red devil creature spoke.
“This is ridiculous.” It said, speaking in near perfect ancient draconian. The dialect was slightly different than the dialect that Spike knew, but it was still similar enough for Spike to understand it.
“D-draconian?” He stammered, and instantly, the creatures fell silent as the red skinned one came forward.
“You speak Devaronese?” He asked.
“Deva-what?” Spike asked, not taking his eyes off the alien.
“Devaronese.” The creature repeated. “The language of Devaronians. Now, I am assuming by your grasp of language, you are sentient?”
Spike didn’t understand what ‘sentient’ meant, but he simply nodded in confusion.
“Very well. What is your name, and the name of your species?”
“Spike.” Said nervously. “Dragon.”
“Dragon?” The alien asked. “Does your species have any genetic relationships with the Arkanian dragon?”
“I…I don’t know.”
“You seem afraid.” The creature asked. “If it makes you feel better, I am a Devaronian. Jedi master Frout at your service.”
“Frout?” Spike asked.
“Yes. With me is Jedi master Norik, Jedi master Varnk, and Jedi master Marcus, all of whom are humans of different planets. Specifically, Corellia, Coruscant and Alderaan.”
“I am assuming you can speak to the creature? The creature identified as Norik asked in the same unintelligible language as before.
I can. His name appears to be Spike. Frout replied, turning to Norik.
“Spike?” Marcus asked. “And I am guessing he speaks Devaronese?”
“He calls it ancient Draconian, but yes. His species is also called ‘Dragon’, but has no known relationship to the Arkanian dragon.”
“That is interesting.” Norik mused, before turning to Spike.
“Where do you come from?” He asked in slightly disjointed Devaronese.
“Equestria.” Spike said slowly.
“And the galactic coordinates?” Norik asked.
“The what?”
“One question, at what technological level is your species?” Frout asked.
“Well, we have trains, they’re pretty new.” Spike said.
“And what do these trains run on? Magnets, electricity, crystalic fusion?” Frout asked.
“Coal.” Spike said simply.
“Then I am assuming your species is at a relatively low technological state.” Norik said softly, before turning back to the others.
This makes this an official first contact scenario. Norik said. One of the first the republic has had to do for a while.
I can sense it though. Marcus said. The potential of this child is significant.
But his species has never been discovered or documented by the republic. Surely the senate would be interested in hearing about this development. Varnk asked.
The Jedi do not answer to the senate. Norik pointed out. They make requests, but they do not need to be heeded on everything. In this case, I believe that our need for initiates is greater than their need to study a new species in depth.
Then we are in agreement that this, Spike, will be taken back to the temple with us? Frout asked.
I guess. Varnk said after a moment of contemplation.
Very well. Frout said, before bending back down to Spike. “Spike, I would like you to come with us. The order that I am part of is in need of potential initiates, but only a few individuals in the galaxy have the potential to join. As it turns out, you may have that potential.”
“But…what about Twilight?” Spike asked, tears suddenly springing to his eyes.
“Who is Twilight?” Frout asked.
“My, sister.” Spike said, sobbing. “She’s the only family I’ve got.”
“Family.” Frout smiled. “As part of the life of the Jedi, you must surrender emotional ties. You will be forbidden to marry, but in doing so, you will serve the Jedi, and the republic, as both emissaries and negotiators.”
“But I’ve got to get home.” Spike sniffed.
“I am sorry, but I don’t know a planet ruled by dragons.” Frout said with a slight smile.
“It’s, not ruled by dragons.” Spike sniffed again. “Equestria is the largest country, and is ruled by ponies.”
“Ponies? As in, old Coruscant horse, type ponies?” Norik asked.
“I…” Spike began, before Frout helped him out.
“I doubt that if he does not even know about hyperspace travel and the republic, that he will know about ancient creatures on a core world.” Frout replied.
Very well. Norik said, standing up. We should make our plans to leave. The Selareco is standing by to take us back to the temple.
With that, Marcus reached down, and picked Spike up. Initially, Spike struggled, but after finding that he couldn’t escape from the grip of the human, and the fact that if anything, if was comforting, he stopped struggling.
As it had before, his mind flitted back to Twilight, and tears once again formed in his eyes. The reality of his situation hit home hard.
His friends didn’t know where he was.
He didn’t know where he was.
He had no idea how to get home.
He was alone.
With this thought dominating his mind, he suddenly realised how tired he was, and slowly, slipped into a dreamless sleep.
This is awesome!
Oh damn poor spike I wonder what happened?
I imagine some Sithy things going on in tbe future! But how cool would it be to have Spike as a Jedi if and when he returns to Equestria? He could wreck kids!
Isn't equestrian derivative of the human language English? Wouldn't he understand that?
How sad! Spike has to sever all ties with Twilight? Sometimes I hate the way the universe of Star Wars works.
I like where this is going...I wonder how Twilight is going to react when Spike comes back to Equestria as a badass Jedi? XD
and females a real most universally stubborn when it comes to moving
back down in the ply pen
he suddenly realised how tiered he was
1. Uhh... Huh? This sentence doesn't make sense.
2. Play.
3. Tired.
Interesting start, next to the table of contents of course which happily provides people with the knowledge so that they won't feel out of the loop
“Who is Twilight?” Frout asked.
“My, sister.” Spike said, sobbing. “She’s the only family I’ve got.”
“Family.” Frout smiled. “As part of the life of the Jedi, you must surrender emotional ties. You will be forbidden to marry, but in doing so, you will serve the Jedi, and the republic, as both emissaries and negotiators.”
“But I’ve got to get home.” Spike sniffed.
“I am sorry, but I don’t know a planet ruled by dragons.” Frout said with a slight smile.
This may be intentional, but this bit is the only issue I have with this chapter. Here it makes them seem as if they don't care that spike is essentially a "baby" lost from his home. And their actions following that make it seem as if they don't care to give him a choice. I'm hoping this is meant to be this way because I can't see any self respecting jedi act like that, regardless of whether or not he shows "potential".
3923463 I agree, the way Jedi are raised always pissed me off. I always found most of them incredibly self-righteous as well. Taking children essentially from childbirth and essentially telling them to think NOTHING. What they teach flat out contradicts emotional behaviour. 'Use your feelings'. How are they supposed to do that when you've taught them to feel nothing since childbirth?
I was watching the prequel trilogy recently, and I realised that in a way, the Jedi order destroyed itself. Simply for one reason: they didn't treat Anakin like he was an innocent child who was separated from his family, which at the time was exactly what he was. They are so desensitised to treating children like soldiers from the get-go. For the supposed 'guardians of peace' they are remarkably cold to him. YMMV, but even though I didn't like Anakin's whining in the second movie, I still feel like it's more a result of living a life designed from a stage he didn't enter it in.
Are these guys supposed to be good guys here? I haven't seen enough of them to make an opinion, but I lost some when the first thing they thought of when they saw Spike was whether or not he would be useful to them. And then they essentially tell him to forget about any family he knows. Not a good start to a healthy relationship.
"I sense something is about to happen." Funny, I would've thought they would have said something more along the lines of: "I sense a disturbance in the Force." That's usually how they speak.
Other than all that an interesting start, I'm curious about how Spike got teleported there in the first place, but honestly I won't care if you don't explain it immediately, after all, all stories have to start somewhere.
4344499 That is indeed a problem, but it's not really a problem with the writing, since the Jedi are known to do that. They don't even accept any that are essentially old enough to think original thoughts.
Hmm speaking of thoughts and the age issue, how old is Spike? He's obviously too old by their standards, and I'm guessing their estimates are off but by how much? I always saw Spike being anywhere between 8-10, mostly because Twilight still acts quite young and she was the one who hatched him.
4344499 that is exactly how Jedi act. Didn't you see what they were doing before spike showed up. Government sanctioned baby stealing.
They didn't talk to the parents, the kids certainly didn't get a choice. Nope its just, oh your force sensitive you belong to the Jedi now. Fuck the Jedi.
At least the sith acknowledge they are evil. Jedi like to think they are paragons of perfection. You know, save a thousand lives and that will balance the fact that they are kidnappers. Fuck no.
This is why the force is producing less force sensitive babies. To protect them from the Jedi. Then when balance still wasn't restored, the force had to wipe out the Jedi.
Anakin truly was the chosen one. He killed the Jedi order, then kill the sith. Only Luke, Leia and Han remained, to create a new and hopefully balanced gray order. No more galaxy conquest or baby stealing.
5077891 Bit late but:
All this takes place before 1000 BBY, when such limits where placed
This is FAR after the time of Revan, Exar, Malak, and all those other fun people- it takes place at the begining of the rule of two.
Some notes:
- too.
- sapient
As everything that feels is sentient for example a frog or a rat.
- Minotaurs
How Norik understood what Spike said?
Maybe handwave by setting up somewhere before that Frout is translating as they go...
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I agree with the assessment. The whole point of taking prospects when they are young is to educate them in a way and "brainwash" them into adhering to the morality and viewpoints that the Jedi Order has.
6269456 It gets worse than that I'm afraid.
Remember the Hundred-Year Darkness? Jedi adhering to the Light Side of the Force fought against Jedi that sought to delve even deeper into the complexities of the Force to harness and learn about vastly different abilities.
With this in-mind, the Jedi are completely responsible for giving birth to the Sith Order itself, and are the rightful inheritors of every atrocity, destruction, AND extinction that the Sith made:
The Bombardment of Taris
The Desolation of Uphrades
And last but not least, arguably the biggest Fuck-Up of them all: The Sacking of Coruscant
Also add-in the atrocities that YOU yourself committed in the name of The Republic:
Such as the infamous Huk War:
Where the Yam'rii species tried to take hold over the planet Kalee (Members of the Yam'rii species were known for their quick tempers and lust for the property of others, and showed little concern for non-Yam'rii species), enslaving the local Kaleesh populace to be shipped offworld and taking their world for themselves.
The Kaleesh resistance was led by Qymaen jai Sheelal
and Sheelal's lover(?) Ronderu lij Kummar
Eventually, Ronderu would die in battle and this would enrage Sheelal
Now known as Grievous, the Kaleesh would eventually drive back the Yam'rii off their planet and all the way back to their own homeworld in retaliation of their suffering underneath the Yam'rii.
Even though the Kaleesh were the true victims in the conflict,
Congradulations "Defenders of Peace" (You monsters) You've condemned an innocent species all because you are lapdogs to an internally-corrupted government, there's another genre that did this thing: Search up the Ishvalan War of Extermination!!
Also, the Devastation of Katarr by Darth Nihilus.
Occurring in 3952 BBY, the last known hundred members of the Jedi Order secretly assembled on the planet Katarr, a colony of the Miraluka species, a race who saw through the Force. Jedi Master Atris summoned the Jedi she had kept contact with to a secret meeting on Katarr, seemingly to discuss the future of the Jedi Order. Her real intention, however, was to use the Jedi as bait, hoping their shadowy adversaries would reveal themselves. She then leaked the location as a ploy to lure a dark presence that she had recently sensed so that she could destroy it. Atris' plan worked, drawing the Sith Lord Darth Nihilus toward Katarr. Atris's plan backfired; the Jedi were not aware of the true extent of Nihilus`power. When Nihilus neared the planet, he spoke, his voice a great hunger that the Miraluka could see and feel through the Force. Using a unique variation of Force Drain, Nihilus stripped the Force from Katarr, killing every living being on the planet: all its living denizens, sentient, flora and fauna. Atris, having not attended the Conclave on Katarr, survived, along with a handful of other Masters who went into hiding.
...Good going there Atris. Sure you pretty much killed off the entire species of a planet you were supposed to protect along with intentionally screwing over a large number of your fellow Jedi Knights that you tricked into going there in the first place. But hey, at least you know who one of the Sith is right? Whose the real monster here: the monster or the one that called for it in the first place?
You mean sapient. Dogs, for example, are sentient but not sapient. Humans are both sentient and sapient.
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The Sacking of Coruscant was an awesome cinematic of badassery.
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It was a few decades before the Mandalorian Wars, at the end of Exar Kun's war, that the New Republic's Jedi Code was introduced. Before then, they were encouraged to feel positive emotions and to form families. Because one guy (Ulric Qel-Droma) went to the Dark Side after losing his wife. Out of tens of thousands of years. The reason? He got involved in the war. The reason? The Jedi hunted him for being Dark and Exar Kun offered to help him not be killed by them.
Amazingly (sarcasm), after the new Code was implemented, there was a major problem of large numbers of Jedi turning to the Dark Side due to suppressing emotions apparently being a bad thing. Who knew!
I feel that the Jedi are a shining example of the trope: Great Job Breaking It, Hero.
I do want to point out, though, that the Jedi have never forced people to join. Come to think of it, the Jedi and Sith alike both (even in Palpatine's Empire) ignore other Force-sensitive organizations that aren't each other. Though, those organizations ignore them, too, sooo. Except for that group that specializes in Force Alchemy and the Sith tricked them into thinking the Jedi were evil tyrants and the Sith were good saviors. They ended up picking a fight with the Jedi and got wiped out. What a dick move.
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In regards some comments about the jedi being sick I personally hold the view that the jedi are more corrupt than the Sith Because the Sith don't hide behind a mask of light and don't have that will essentially Renault in their orders own destruction from the inside
Auto correct is a pain on the Kendal fire
When this is set, I will uncover.
Before i go into this story is the author aware how much of a dicks Jedi's can be and how messed up their systems of 'morals' can be? Star Wars universe of those stories which can really blind people to greater implications, not that i am supporting how Siths run their show, but at the least they are honest about it.
But anyway, the story takes into account the full complexity of the issue?
Now what’s truly deadly a giant dragon that can use the force
Sorry I'm late to the party so what are the chances that, the 'old Coruscant horse, type ponies' is really spike's home planet?
Not sure why but I wanted to reread an entire story, yeah sounds like a bad idea, lol.
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I'm just starting but so far I'm really interested
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Nope, the Jedi would ask permission from the parents if they could induct the child into the Order. If the parents refused the Jedi accepted it but did help the parents learn how to raise a Force-sensitive child. The Sith were the baby stealers as soon in the infant stealing plan that Sidious tried during TCW and later succeeded during the Empire. The Jedi weren't perfect but were better than the Sith and the whole gray order is bs since its an excuse for people to make edgy characters who can use the Dark Side without any of the consequences.
10121472 What's the source for the claim that the Jedi required the consent of the parents to take a youngling?
From what I understood, the idea was that if you were force sensitive, you must train as a Jedi, to avoid being a Sith. Because of course there are no other options. After all, everything else in nature is absolutes. But it's backed by George Lucas himself. You can only be Jedi or Sith.
So by taking the child they were doing the parents a favour, and little things like consent could be overlooked. If you don't do well enough in your training, you are dumped on a Jedi owned agri-planet to work as a farmer for the rest of your natural life.
<This makes this an official first contact scenario.>” Norik said. “<One of the first the republic has had to do for a while.>”
“<I can sense it though.>” Marcus said. “<The potential of this child is significant.>”
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I thought you like to know when the narrator program is on these are quickly skipped because you put the arrows in making it hard for people to read the series thought you like to know that.
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I did not know that actually, don’t even think the narration stuff was around when this was written XD
I will amend that now :)
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Poor spike.
Does this count as kidnapping. it sure feels like it.
????? wtf. over 100 chapters?! well time to get to work then