Princess Luna has come to Fluttershy's cottage to learn more about public speaking, and the need to not yell.
Before the night is over, however, she gains something much more precious.
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That was adorable.
Now it's time to tell you everything wrong with it! Not much actually. Just a couple things I noticed.
The narrative verb tense seems to switch back and forth between present and past throughout the fic. That's generally not a thing that's supposed to happen.
I feel like there should be a comma between "Luna's" and "nuzzling."
Other than that it looks great, now have an upvote.
This sure is cute
Very nice!
So when's the wedding?
Do I Smell A Hint Of Lunashy