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Cyanjames2819


Um... hi. I like reading, writing and drawing. Sorry, I don't take commissions/requests anymore, I don't trust myself in finishing them. Have a nice day/night, everyone.

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Not Edited yet, so expect mistakes and rushed chapters. Have a nice day/night.


A strange falling star has fallen to the Northern kingdom. Luna and Cadence went out to investigate and found claw prints in and out of the crater. A new creature is now loose in Equestria, and Luna can't figure out if it's dangerous or not. After a week of the discovery, Fluttershy went missing in the Everfree Forest, and Luna fears the worst for the timid mare of Kindness. But what she doesn't know, is that the timid mare is alive and well.
Now, Equestria and the royal pony sisters are in danger by Luna and Celestia's old foe, Nightmare. Will the new visitor help the sisters defeat the force of evil, or turn on them and take over Equestria with the help of the parasitic nightmare.

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MAKE THE CREATURE FALL IN LOVE WITH FLUTTERSHY!!!! NOW! *Snap*Snap*Snap*

I wood like to say that this is a good start to a story. I have given it fums up for the story. I look forward to the next chapter. keep up the good work.

It looks like there is some misunderstanding that lead to some problems. Will Fluttershy be the one to help Nebula threw this? It looks like he has the power to level Ponyville if he is provoked . Can Fluttershy convince her friends that Nebula can be trust it? Well Luna trust Fluttershy judgment? Things can git bad real quickly If Nebula thinks that Fluttershy life is in danger. It is funny that all the traps has not slowed Nebula down one bit. It is annoying him. Dos he have the ability to git Mad at them? Will he show them restraint in the use of his power, like not killing them? A good Chapter, I do hope to see more soon. Keep up the good work.

Although I can allready see an improvement from your first chapters (good job btw) you should consider getting a proof reader or editor if you don't allready have one.

Overall, I like where this story is going and am crossing all my crossable didgits for a nebula shy ship.

Now that princess Luna has Nebula at a location that he well stay at. She can ask why he is hear. It seems to me that Nebula is an Elomental. they are not a evil fores or a good fores. Was it Luna attempts to communicate with Nebula when he was a star galaxy that brot Nebula to this world? Is he having a mid life crisis or in his case a mid existence crisis? whit is the meaning of existence? Is this all there is? Is there more to existence? Nebula has made it a point not to attack unless he is attack by someone wit the intent to kill. Can he read mines? When Lunas scouts tried to restrained him, It was just a annoying him but they where not attacking him.

I like this story and the direction it is going. Keep up the good work. I do hope there will be more soon.

Wow that was fast! A grate chapter and I do hope there well be more. I am glad that Nebula is a omnivore. It seems that Nebula knows a lot about Equestria, has he ben watching them from spase, or is he poling the information from there mines? He read a dictionary extremely fast. Was it to learn moor about Equestria? He seems to be craving companionship which he is getting from Fluttershy. This seems like something new to Nebula. This is not something he is willing to let go. I can't Wate for the next Chapter. keep up the good work.

I thought this was about the actual ABC television series, damn it... aw well. Take an upvote.

I cant wait for the meting beatween Nebula, Princess Celestia, Princess Luna and Fluttershy. It is looking good so far. Keep up the good work.

Thank you for the grate chapter.I do hope to see more soon. keep up the good job.

While technically I didn't find any spelling mistakes there were several words throughout that were spelled correctly but used in the wrong context. Doesn't mean I don't like the story though and I really would like to see where this goes :pinkiehappy:

That was a grate chapter. I hope there well be more. It wood be nice if you gave more information on the bad dragon. He seem's to know Luna from the pass. He was defeated but was he just a spirit that took over the bad dragons body? Well it return?

as good as it gits? No! That was a grate Chapter and I know they well git better and better as the story moves on to new chapters. Keep up the grate work.

Nebula to save the day, hiraaa!! It look like Nightmare moon is back and Nebula has the chants to prove himself a pertecter again. We shall see if he fined meaning in his long life whit Fluttershy and Playtime. Keep up the good work and I do look foreword to your next chapter. :moustache:

I'm really enjoying reading this. One of the better fics in progress on the site if I might be so bold!:yay:
You might get some flak from him being overpowered but the story doesn't seem to flaunt it so it's fine by me.
Any story with my favorite pony gets a look through at least. An this is one I'll definitely be following.

Great job on the chapter. Can't wait for more awesomeness...to graphic Nebula to graphic...for some people.

O that Pinkie, trying to be every ponys friend. It looks like Nightmare moon is trying to kill the bearers of harmony's. Keep up the good work.

YOU my good sir need and EDITOR!!!!!!:twilightsmile::derpytongue2:

I am surprise that there not more comments? The chapter was good and I shell wait for the next chapter. Keep up the good work. :moustache:

I know that Nebula made play time but this is the first hint that she is more then a construct that Nebula made on the spot. Did Nebula have Play time as part of him from the start of the story? How old is Play time? What is her powers besides strength? How is the Doctor involved? Is this the only time he will be in the story or is he going to play a bigger part in the story? Was the Doctor looking for a missing Nebula, which led him to Equestria? In this alternate universe, is Princess Celestia and Luna aware of the Doctor and know what he is? Are they in a good relationship with the Doctor, or is it like they don't know who side he's on? After all the Princess are immortal and may have met the Doctor at a time from the pass. Thar may be some history whit the doctor?

I cat't wait to see how the next Chapter is going to play out. Keep up the good work. :moustache:

This story... DESERVES A MUSTACHE :moustache:
Shy: I LOVE THIS STORY!!!:flutterrage:

Sorry everyone, no chapter for today. I'm pretty sure I won't be able to give a chapter every week, sorry but I can't think of anything to put in the chapter sense I have to think what to put in with the others. If you have an idea, don't hesitate to comment please. I'll try to post it next week.

Yes! Finally! Expect a new chapter this Friday.:pinkiehappy:
Have a nice day.:twilightsmile:

I am glad to see a new chapter. I can see that Fluttershy has develop fillings for Nebula. Is she going to have the strength to tell Nebula her fillings? Will Nebula have the ability to fill it and retern the fillings?

Keep up the grate work you are doing her.

Dragonfox

A good chapter. I wonder how long Nightmare Moon will try before she confront Nebula? Is she afraid of Nebula? I wood be, if I had to attack him. Keep up the good Work you are doing.

Dragonfox

This is awesome! Cant wait for the next chapter!

Oh, and when is Nebula and Flutters wedding? I wanna plan it, pick me pick me pick me! :pinkiehappy:

Holy Hell! HOW THE HELL DID I FORGET TO PUBLISH THE DAMN CHAPTER!!! GAAAAAAAAAAHHH:flutterrage::twilightangry2::raritydespair::pinkiecrazy:

... Well... at least it's up now... sorry for that... I'm forgetful sometimes. 'sigh':facehoof:

I am surprise that you have no comments yet. This chapter is as good as normal. I am enjoying the story and hope to see more of it.

Is Nebula going to recover from this? I hope so. Playtime and Fluttershy wood be heartbroken if sum thing Keep Nebula from cumming back to them.

I almost fill sorry for Nightmare Moon but she did this to herself. Is she going to live or die by Nebula hands? If Nebula kills Nightmare, will he be forever change? Can Princess Celestia and Luna stand to have sum one that can kill a person like that? Not that they have the ability to make him leave if they wonted. Which leave me with the same question. Is Nebula going to recover from this?

Keep up the good work you are doing and I do hope to see a new chapter soon.

Dragonfox

3589644 Thanks for the comment, Dragonfox. I like reading your questions, because of the questions, they keep me in track on what I should write in the future. And yeah, Nightmare screwed herself with her failed plan.

Again, thanks for the comment. Have a nice day.:twilightsmile:

I am surprise that there no comments on this chapter. so I will be the first. I have to say good Job on the chapter. Keep up the good Job you are doing. I do hope to see a new chapter to this story soon.

Dragonfox

i like what you write in the author's notes... funny:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

That is if I don't get to you first because if I do you going to wish nebula got there first. Cyanjames2819 making fluttershy cry is the fastest way to piss me off.
*pulls out a large flamethrower, a tri-bladed trench knife, a vat of xenomorph blood, Dead Sea water, 100% alcohol, and a Team Fortress 2 medic gun.*
Imagine the worst things I can do with these and the you have a silver lining to look forwards too.:twilightangry2::flutterrage::pinkiecrazy:

I am surprise that you have no comments on this chapter.

a good chapter and I can't wait to see the next one. So keep up the good job you are doing.

In the start of this story, Nebula seem to have unlimited power. Is he at the end of his life span? Or was it Play time being afraid of him that crack his cor?

Dragonfox

4375753 The cause of Nebula's core cracking was because he broke his code of honor. Almost like Spike's Dragon code, but a tad more severe then normal, causing the stored magic inside him to flood out of control, thus turning him into something else, and forcing him into an emotional haywire the moment it happened.

mmmh... You picked my interest, might wanna read it later. But for now, night night. :twilightsmile:

4448240 Hope you enjoy it.:twilightsmile:
Although expect mistakes with each chapter. This story isn't exactly 'New'.

No offence, but I can't help but notice the lack of grammar at some places. Have you ever pondered on getting an editor?

4451595 I have, but I don't really have time to look for one. Too much going on around me and stories to write.

2753262 Your grammar's almost as bad as the author's!

4466572 That's not very nice. I don't mind taking that kind of comment going out on me. I really need big practice with story telling and whatnot, I know, but don't lash out on other fellow readers just because a small little error in the comment section. I can read them just fine, it's on My story comments, not yours. Comments don't always have to be professionally written, if you haven't caught up on that yet.
Now lets forget what you said to our fellow reader, and say something else about my story instead, and lash out on that and me. If you keep insulting our fellow readers on my stories comment section, then I wouldn't have a choice but to delete them, unless you both are arguing about the story itself, but please go do it somewhere else. I don't want bad behavior being written around here.
Thank you for taking your time on reading this, if you got this far.:twilightsmile:

I can't wait for a new chapter! That cliffhanger hurts man..:fluttershbad:

So is there going to be a sequel?

This... is saddening...really...saddening... I wished Nebula would still be there.....I still feel like the story isn't over yet..For me it isn't a happy ending....Nor it is a bad as well....But somehow I still can't accept the ending....Sequel? Perhaps? Now if you will excuse me, I need to get that depression out...


With cute little kitties.

I think the story was a good one. The ending is sad but sweet. That Nebula was unable to spend his life with Fluttershy and Playtime make it sad but I did enjoy the story and hope to see a new one. So Keep up the good work you are doing.

Dragonfox

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