I am a clopper that writes clop simple as.
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Your understanding of word use is quite poor.
Just because words mean the same thing doesn't mean they can be used in the same way. Words have different tones and formalities and connotations.
Also run on sentences are bad. Sentence length defines pace. Staying consistent to maintain a mood is important.
As for your use of cliches, stop it. Theres a time to use them but they are use sparingly and intentionally.
As for the story itself, I've read better. I've even written better and by barely having anything happen, leaving me plenty of room to explore another time.
Why? because I actually have characters, as opposed to puppets to project this sue character you have here.
My only problem before reading.
thanks for the feedback but go easy it's my first clopfic
umm... it's a little hard to read what is going on
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not even an excuse. If its not by a certain standard then you gotta step it up.
3242727 Any tips then?
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read more, you learn more. read everything. spread out.
3242589 ???
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You said he was unknown, but then went on (in the same sentence) to say exactly who he was.
I'm waiting
I like the idea of the plot. but you need to work on ssentence structure and punctuation.
3243187 thx man i will improve just give it time i have some good plot twists and ideas
It being a first clopfic isn't the problem- the problem is this sounds like the writing of an 11-12 year old boy.
That's one heck of a sentence...
3243972 an 11 - 12 yr ol wouldnt even be able to comprehend the shit im going to make these ponies do. but thx anyway
The writing is...
Awfully off...
Even for me who can accept almost anything...
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My sure if I wanna read this
Not enough has happened to judge by the story, but you need an editor. I suggest looking on this site for a few groups that offer finding people for it and going through their rules on how to get in touch with an editor. This story has potential, but so many mistakes will detract from it.
Are you going to finish this?