it begins. and i know i aint gunna be first

You know you could make a group for these fics.

didn't know what I was getting into with this story, but it seems like its unfinished, like with rarity subconsciously regretting doing that by her not being able to taste ,or the ending why just stop there, is their gonna be a sequel?

I'm not saying write more to change the tone, just what happened to button mash, or rarity, or why was Twi so adamant about this, at least do an epilogue please.

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There are at least two already.

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I didn't feel writing an epilogue was necessary. The point, to me at least, is not what happened afterwards, but how the ponies reacted to the situation both before and after the removal of Button's mother. I wanted to write a story in which two perfectly happy ponies, who happen to engage in something many people consider wrong and immoral, get their lives ruined due to the opinions of others.

I'll keep your points in mind, though, as they are very valid. I will not write a sequel, mainly because I explored the scenario I wanted to, and I do not wish to go further than that.

3095747 Fair enough, are you going to write a sequel? I mean it would be interesting to see how Button will cope with the fact that his mom is in the Canterlot Dungeons.

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I realize I just posted "I will not write a sequel", but never say never, I guess. It definitely has potential to be an interesting story.

I just don't feel quite comfortable writing "serious" stories yet. My main focus has been oneshot clopfics, so it's a challenge to do these. Maybe once I'm a better writer, I will.

3095779 Ah, well how about for the next one you have Twilight/Vinyl/Octavia. As far as I know it's never been done.

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I'll keep it in mind, but I won't promise anything. Depends on my ability to come up with scenario.

Totally forgot to complement your writing , thats what made me ask for a sequel in the first place!

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Thank you! It means a lot to me.

Damn.

Dude...

You've outdone yourself.
2nd most touching pony story I've read.
and NO the first wasn't "My little dashie" honestly I dont see what all the hype was with that one.
I'm a man, I don't cry. The most saddest story I've read made me WANT to cry, I was crying on the inside.
This story though, I can't tell if it's because I'm up at 4 am or was your story that good, but there is a small tear building up on my left eye.
I dedicate that tear to this story. Here's looking at you kid.

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Thank you very much. It means the world to me.

It's not bad, but it doesn't really feel like a complete story. There's a lot of things that seem to be left out. Like, wouldn't Sweetie Belle tell Rarity about Button getting beat up? She has a crush on him so surely she would have taken notice of something like that, and even if she didn't see it the other students must have surely been talking about it. How would Sweetie's reaction affect Rarity? We don't see Sweetie's reaction to anything at all. Not to mention how much Twilight's relationship with Rarity changed in the end.
It's not a bad story per se, it's got great emotional impact, it just feels like it's missing important parts of itself; like a rough draft more than a complete work.

this was a very good read. Thank you .I was going to pass it up until I noticed the " not clop" I felt through out the whole story what celestia said at the end. There where no good way for anypony to be happy. I felt bad for button and his mom( who really needs a name.) But what she did was very bad. Rarity did the right thing, but in a very wrong way. Button had no idea what he was doing was bad and lost everything. This was a very difficult subject, but was done so well. This story gets all my love keep writing what ever you enjoy. :)

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I intended to focus primarily on Button and his mother, as that was the point of interest to me.

However, I can definitely see that in order to create a proper story, I'd have to flesh this out and incorporate more of the characters better.

Thanks for the critique. It helps a lot.

THATS IT

I'll sum up my thoughts.

*Ahem* Fuck you Rarity, fuck you Celestia and fuck you Ponyville.

That is all, I still liked it a lot.

Reality people we all know if this happened this would go national however it was a terribly sad ending so author u can go fuck yourself for writing this toilet paper of an ending and continue to write more in maybe explaing a better conclusion.

DAMN YOU CELESTIA
DAMN YOU EQUESTRIA
ALL I EVER WANTED
ALL I EVER NEEDED
GIVE ME BACK MY JOYBOY YOU MONSTERS
I'M DYING IN HERE!

(meanwhile in Pony kindergarden)
"I choose you, Pony Squirtle!"

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Somepony's unhappy! But I suppose as an electric engine I am rather too clinical to be affected by such things. Sad story though, but a logical conclusion to all the Button/Elaina clopfics out there.

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Ignorance is an awful thing. That, and gossip.