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A new land is discovered outside of the Equestrian borders, outside of their map. And for the first time in decades, Equestria had nothing directly related to it. The now United Nation of Griffdom, which discovered the land, had found themselves with something they need to share. So much so that they will go against their own beliefs and pride. And ally themselves to Equestria.

But the day it all comes together, the exchange and the signing of treaties, isn’t well received. What appeared to be an insurgency of a new species attacks Canterlot Castle where the meeting takes place, and the kings and queens of Griffdom don’t survive the encounter.

Equestria finds itself in a difficult standing. A nation with no leaders is slowly eating itself and its crazed eyes are blaming Equestria, while those that begun the horror are still on the loose, and the discovery from outside Equestrian borders wants to come and greet their newly discovered neighbors, but they have their own reasons.

But none is to worry. It’s all in the plan. The plan of the one and only.

Nothing is left unchecked. No one is left to go against the plan without the consent of the one and only.

Three peons had an opportunity to intervene, and were brought down. The princess, the assistant, and the stranger, who's strangely still on the loose.

Now what happens to the peons once the one obtains their unconditional loyalty? Nothing. In the end, if they're ever to meet, all they can do is tell stories. And wait for an end they are not sure will come.


“Why do people constantly repeat that my research is against what’s ‘sacred’ or it’s a ‘taboo’? We are nothing more than chemical processes that work like clockwork to the code that I base my work upon. Why do people deny that they are nothing more than a tool? Is it because it reminds them of their mortality? Bah! It doesn’t matter, those people are chained, but I am free. Free to take control. A tool to make things as they should be.”

--Head researcher Laura Minerva. “The future.”


A story which will take on Ancient Humans, with built on social logic, and attempting on world building and future politics, which by default includes: Language barriers, ideologies of relationships, ideologies of ways of rule, numb inducing illogical hate, what is to be alive, and if you are not unique do you matter?

Action scenes are a must have, but it shall develop in between; norms and the 'common knowledge' is my goal to show.



Characters will be added as chapters with them are added. As well as tags.

I don't own My Little Pony Frienship is Magic, or anything related to it. I do own the cover art though.

The gore's not REALLY gore, but things that might freak some people out.

This is a re-written verson, or if there's no chapter's it's still on its re-write. They all shall be released at the same time once done as well as a fixed image. It will be the same story. The way to tell however will be different.

Still first person though, but with a twist.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 12 )

It's back :pinkiehappy:

... I'd have more to say, but right now my brain is a little fried. I think of something to say tomorrow :twilightblush:

Another good chapter. I still have no idea where this is going, but it was nice to read about the Griffion/Equestrian relations.

Just to let you know, I think I saw a few tense errors here and there. And I can't tell if you meant to cut off the last line as a stylistic choice or if there was trouble importing it.

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Yeah, I notice that the story went from 17.6k to 15, please tell me where is this error?:raritydespair:

Edit: Saw it. Damn, the best part was left out.

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Fixed, the rest of the chapter should be seeable now.

If anyone can explain me how it was deleted I would apreciate it. I don't use GoogleDocs unless it's to show the chapter. So that's that.

Pretty good. But where is the creepy text?

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Maybe it's your format of text, change it so you can easily see it.

Im confused on what the fuck is happening, but im liking the story

Well that was a weird, but enjoyable read. How much father down the rabbit hole is there left to go?

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:pinkiesmile:Well, not sure let me check.

*Walks down a spiral staircase, a written sign above spelling "plot."*

"It's dark in here... the smell is awful, like death. And I find it incredibly uncomfortable to keep walking down this stairwell, but I seem to always catch this little light on the edge of the spiral every time I look. It always appears to tell it will be an exit; an end. But it seems only as another step into a more dark, fowl smelling, and yet interesting, experience. And don't get me started on that feeling I get that something is always watching my every step as I go."

*Shivers*

I can only say I would prefer to write gruesome than dark. Too much dependency in the reader's attention to detail. I mean, I know because I wrote it of the small connections in between things, but it's there to hope readers can see those as well, and enjoy the mental breakdown.

But out of the good/shit looking writing, I believe there's much to see.:rainbowkiss:

EDIT: Just in case of confusion. That up there was me explaining what is coming, or how it will be at least, in an 'unusual' matter.

Confused. But, interesting. :rainbowderp:

I think I'll read some more. :moustache:

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