Like mother like daughter. Princess Skyla wants to take a vacation on earth, by swapping bodies with a human, but can only find a guy. Looks like he's going to have to deal with being a Princess for a few days...
“Oh yeah? Well we’ll see about that!” I shot at him with a glare. Shining just sighed. “It figures. You know, it’d be nice if you two did something other than occasionally throw a challenge each other’s way.”
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Ohh! Peeing as a mare, now that must be akward... Oh I hope skyla doesn't fuck up his 'life' back home, and if she does he should take her place! Be funny as heck if she turns out to be a little b*tch or something.
3010622 Honestly the clop could be a side project, but I would give a lot of bits for some scenes where they make love . Plain sex just makes the plot do weird things to justify it...
Luminare seems like a good guy and a good friend. (Although, I don't know how to feel about him 'hitting' on the not-Skyla. I mean, he has Skyla's body, but it isn't. So, it's not absolutely wrong.)
Still, I'm on the fence here. In the first story, the main character had some things to go back to {a hot girlfriend, a few friends, I don't know if he had family though since he never mentioned them} here he has nothing to go back too.
While Cadance was just a really mean, spiteful character who had nothing of worth to go back too {Except her wealth and title} Skyla has a loving family and friends and is a nice mare.(Which is good. She was raised by two nice ponies and the story would seem really stupid and bland if she was a 'mean-Cadance 2.0' of this story.)
Obviously the ending's going to be different. I still feel weird though, since it may or may not have sex and with not-Skyla. (What technicality of it is if he slept with someone with her body. Well, it's not 'HER' body since they both transformed into one another instead of switching mind. But still, the fact remains.)
Well I can give you a big clue for one of those right now. In the story Luminare mentions Shining's Sister. Notice how the word 'mother' never comes up during that time.
He really needs to get Skyla explain how her body works to him and I wonder if she's having the same problems in his body. Also I bet Shining knew already.
well there better not have been any clop yet , nothing has even happened yet , which i feel like i should comment the pacing of this feels way different than the original , and so far im pretty sure i prefer the original's......
3028367 It's not like running is that different from walking, also how did Cadance in the original story go from stumbling to walking just fine an hour later? The magic helps you adapt to the body quickly.
3031646 except running is worlds different from walking , stumbling to walking is believable enough since walking is a relatively easy mooter skill for any developed body , and the character in question already fully understood the concept of walking which (one would assume) easily translates to most animal bodies , in this case just adding extra steps for the extra legs than need stepping
running however takes entire bodily co-ordination to maintain , if i had a couple body lifting wings on my back i doubt i would be able to instantly break out into a run with them as i could now with my current body , though since it's just a shift in weight and people can run while carrying heavy things it would probably take me a few seconds to adjust first........sigh stuff like this always happens when posting late before bed -.-'......
Well if it makes you feel any better, it's not stated if she runs flawlessly. She could have bumped into things a lot while trying to chase him, but since the scene cut we didn't see all that.
3100206 There will be clop, but it's probably not going to be as... 'prominent' as it was in the original story. (Also trying to get new chapter done, I know it's been two weeks. I'm very sorry)
3326733 Tell life to stop throwing crap at me. I haven't had any time to write in days. Everything I think I do: Work: Oh hey, someone called out, oh hey we have a catering order, oh hey blah blah blah is happening CAN YOU WORK LATE/EARLY AGAIN?!
This is like the second week in a row I've had close to 50 hours. I don't mind the money, but my god I'd like to have a day to myself.
3355890 I'm not putting it on Hiatus on a whim. The sad fact is I won't have time to write, and haven't had time to write. Trust me I know how annoying it is to have to wait for a story to update, but what can I do? I'm not sure how TwistedSpectrum managed to do it. Do they go to school? Do they just have periods of time where they can sit and write? I don't have that. I'm busy. I'm moving at the end of this month, and really have been constantly called in to work for extra hours. Things need to calm down before I can post anything.
It's not that I'm not trying. I've got 'stuff written' But it's nothing I can post. I know it's depressing to hear, but that's just how it is right now. The story will update when I can update it. There isn't anything else I can do.
3466581 Well maybe she stays of her own free will or Not-Skyla goes back of the same. Personally I'm hoping for the first one. 3355901 huh, I didn't even notice the hiatus label. Well whenever you have time I'd love to read more. I think this is better than Twisted's prequel, no offense to the king of TF/TG. In the meantime I shall leave a like and now a favorite. Also, if you need a prereader, send me a message and I'll give you my Skype (I prefer Skype for text-based chat as it's a little easier for me to get on. I don't have to load fimfiction.net or reload the page each time I get a message). On a different note: why must the thumbs down button be so close to the other and the favorite button? I'm on my phone and actually hit it accidentally with my clumsy thumb. Fortunately I noticed and instantly reversed the damage and the strain on my conscience.
Three sea shells. Love the demolition man reference.
This is pretty good so far! Can't wait for the rest!
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Love the story so far. Keep up the good work.
You're such a little tease, you know that?
keep writing, love it :)
Hahahahahahaha I wonder if this will end like the original.
YHEEER
This is getting better and better.
Great work and i'mm really looking forward to the next one.
Happy writings.
bet the not Skyla will masturbate soon.
Ohh! Peeing as a mare, now that must be akward... Oh I hope skyla doesn't fuck up his 'life' back home, and if she does he should take her place! Be funny as heck if she turns out to be a little b*tch or something.
Good chapter. I hope there willl be no clop. Such stories are valuable because of their prospect.
I don't think this story needs any clop, it's an entertaining enough read in its own right.
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Honestly the clop could be a side project, but I would give a lot of bits for some scenes where they make love . Plain sex just makes the plot do weird things to justify it...
Yay! more mindfucking!
I has feeling that princess 'cadence' is eventually going to make an appearance (not human cadence but human as pony cadence.)
Now I'm curious as to who Luminare's parents are.
Could it be... Blueblood and Twilight Sparkle
Nah, he would be an Alicorn if his mother was one, wouldn't he?Scrath that. I just noticed that little Twilight is a unicorn.Luminare seems like a good guy and a good friend. (Although, I don't know how to feel about him 'hitting' on the not-Skyla. I mean, he has Skyla's body, but it isn't. So, it's not absolutely wrong.)
Still, I'm on the fence here. In the first story, the main character had some things to go back to {a hot girlfriend, a few friends, I don't know if he had family though since he never mentioned them} here he has nothing to go back too.
While Cadance was just a really mean, spiteful character who had nothing of worth to go back too {Except her wealth and title} Skyla has a loving family and friends and is a nice mare.(Which is good. She was raised by two nice ponies and the story would seem really stupid and bland if she was a 'mean-Cadance 2.0' of this story.)
Obviously the ending's going to be different. I still feel weird though, since it may or may not have sex and with not-Skyla. (What technicality of it is if he slept with someone with her body. Well, it's not 'HER' body since they both transformed into one another instead of switching mind. But still, the fact remains.)
Keep up the good work regardless.
Yeah, you really don't clop too early the story. You want to build character! The dates will be perfect for a lil' bonding!
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Well I can give you a big clue for one of those right now. In the story Luminare mentions Shining's Sister. Notice how the word 'mother' never comes up during that time.
no need for clop really the story is fine without it. not that I would be opposed to clop mind you
He really needs to get Skyla explain how her body works to him and I wonder if she's having the same problems in his body. Also I bet Shining knew already.
Really enjoying this so far, keep it up
You know what, I'd be happy even if this had no clop in it at all, it's really funny, and i'd like to see things go back to normal afterwards.
Yeah, can't see clop happening between these characters, would go against their sensibilities
when did this new human learn how to run?....
well there better not have been any clop yet , nothing has even happened yet , which i feel like i should comment the pacing of this feels way different than the original , and so far im pretty sure i prefer the original's......
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I don't expect to please everyone. You very well may not like this story, but hey at least you will always have the original.
3026046 "when did this new human learn how to run?...."....
Good read, so far. =) Can't wait for more chapters, though. I'd love to see how this all plays out.
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It's not like running is that different from walking, also how did Cadance in the original story go from stumbling to walking just fine an hour later? The magic helps you adapt to the body quickly.
3031646 except running is worlds different from walking , stumbling to walking is believable enough since walking is a relatively easy mooter skill for any developed body , and the character in question already fully understood the concept of walking which (one would assume) easily translates to most animal bodies , in this case just adding extra steps for the extra legs than need stepping
running however takes entire bodily co-ordination to maintain , if i had a couple body lifting wings on my back i doubt i would be able to instantly break out into a run with them as i could now with my current body , though since it's just a shift in weight and people can run while carrying heavy things it would probably take me a few seconds to adjust first........sigh stuff like this always happens when posting late before bed -.-'......
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Well if it makes you feel any better, it's not stated if she runs flawlessly. She could have bumped into things a lot while trying to chase him, but since the scene cut we didn't see all that.
3032336 oh k.....
If this one proves to be even half as entertaining as the its descendant, this is going to be fun
I think this would be better without the clop! Humor sounds like a good substitute.
Well, I can't say that I won't be disappointed without the clop, but, whatever goes, goes.
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There will be clop, but it's probably not going to be as... 'prominent' as it was in the original story. (Also trying to get new chapter done, I know it's been two weeks. I'm very sorry)
Hehe. Viginas.
I need more!!!
Ëk
it is been like a month!
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Check my blog. Like I put up in the description I update how things are going on there.
I confess, I hope things don't work out as tidily as before, at least not without quite a bit more work from the characters.
FRIKIN UPDATE ALREADY
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Tell life to stop throwing crap at me. I haven't had any time to write in days. Everything I think I do: Work: Oh hey, someone called out, oh hey we have a catering order, oh hey blah blah blah is happening CAN YOU WORK LATE/EARLY AGAIN?!
This is like the second week in a row I've had close to 50 hours. I don't mind the money, but my god I'd like to have a day to myself.
Yes, your right we should keep bugging you for your time every day.But why must you put it on hiatus all we ask is to update regularly.
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I'm not putting it on Hiatus on a whim. The sad fact is I won't have time to write, and haven't had time to write. Trust me I know how annoying it is to have to wait for a story to update, but what can I do? I'm not sure how TwistedSpectrum managed to do it. Do they go to school? Do they just have periods of time where they can sit and write? I don't have that. I'm busy. I'm moving at the end of this month, and really have been constantly called in to work for extra hours. Things need to calm down before I can post anything.
It's not that I'm not trying. I've got 'stuff written' But it's nothing I can post. I know it's depressing to hear, but that's just how it is right now. The story will update when I can update it. There isn't anything else I can do.
Well all I can say is good luck.
I loved it all and it's going to be a long three days for him
Curse you! Now I'm going to feel bad no matter whether Skyla gets to switch back or not!
3466581 Well maybe she stays of her own free will or Not-Skyla goes back of the same. Personally I'm hoping for the first one.
3355901 huh, I didn't even notice the hiatus label. Well whenever you have time I'd love to read more. I think this is better than Twisted's prequel, no offense to the king of TF/TG. In the meantime I shall leave a like and now a favorite. Also, if you need a prereader, send me a message and I'll give you my Skype (I prefer Skype for text-based chat as it's a little easier for me to get on. I don't have to load fimfiction.net or reload the page each time I get a message).
On a different note: why must the thumbs down button be so close to the other and the favorite button? I'm on my phone and actually hit it accidentally with my clumsy thumb. Fortunately I noticed and instantly reversed the damage and the strain on my conscience.
I don't know the exact ages of Skyla and Lumin', both are oddly non-pony like, but I'm guessing their teen years?
Nonetheless, I look forward to see what happens with the nameless human who has swapped place with Skyla!