How it Began

Luna is questions by how she became Nightmare Moon, so she decides to ask Celestia how it all began.

Please tell me if you see any typos. I go to a french school, only have little periods for english, the rest is all in french.

Chapters (5)

Chapter one : The Begining · 18th Jul 2013 · 225 words
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Chapter two: Starting to Reveal · 18th Jul 2013 · 279 words
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Chapter three : The Battle to Save LUNA!!!!! · 19th Jul 2013 · 185 words
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Chapter four: The End is Sad · 19th Jul 2013 · 355 words
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Chapter five: The Terrible Nightmares · 20th Jul 2013 · 139 words
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Brony of Truth #1 · Jul 19th, 2013 · · · Chapter four: The End is Sad ·

Luna is questioned by how she became ~~NMM~~(Nightmare Moon) so Celestia decides to ~~revel~~(reveal) how it all ~~begane~~(began).
p(P)lease tell me if you see any typos(.)~~,please.~~

You want someone to tell you if you see any typos? Well let's start with the description...

This is how it can look...

Luna questions how she became Nightmare Moon, so she decides to ask Celestia how it all began.

You seem a little young, so hopefully you don't take this the wrong way, but...your writing could use a little work. Don't worry if it doesn't look the best right now, you'll get better as time goes on. Unfortunately, because it's going to be so difficult to read, I'm not going to take the time to look over your story, sorry. Best of luck in the future though.