My friend, Brandon, sent me a link to a tutorial on how to teleport to Equestria. I decided to try it myself, without think of the consequences. Now we must find a way back AND how to turn back into humans. And possibly defeat a God of Chaos along the way.
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Okay.... Without even reading this first, I notice a couple problems already.
First, a tutorial on how to teleport to Equestria?! Well, gee, good thing he has this handy dandy tutorial on how to teleport into the dimension of a TV show!
And also, your Chapters are way too short. Try combining some together.
3003269 Well, when you have so little of original reasons on how to teleport to Equestria...yeah. Ideas are hard to come by. And I know they are short, being a closet brony with people in your house, you only have so much time to make longer chapters.
3003382 Another problem I noticed. A good Chapter is a detailed one. add some more detail.
Why do people like this so much? I feel like I under-did this, but I got 9 favs so far! Someone explain this to me.
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Their is a certain charm to it I guess. I have a story with the same "Problem" as this one. I feel like I didn't do much yet it's my most popular one. Your chapters are very short but are pretty enjoyable to read. It's just good, I can't explain it better than that.
3128298 Thanks for that explanation. Ya know, I didn't think I was that good of a writer til I tried it
to get home, find the pink party pony, the queen, and the living fluff wall........... this telepathic message will self-destuct when i bloody fell like it
or when i finish the extended dubstep remix of stairway to heaven.... good luck, and may the shining light of the mightyest card guide you home
in the words of bell "what had god wrought?" or was that the prez? no, he said "this is an interesting invention, but who would use it?" or something along those lines... any howdle, that is like giving pinkie a party bazooka (but i do have one) PINKIE! get out of my computer! (why are you taliking to the wall pinkie?) and now RD... wonderfull...
or rarity a sparkle and rhinestone laser... actually that might be usefull in combat... off to work! AVANTI!
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