Snow shrouds the world as the war between the Pegasus and Unicorn Tribes rage on.
An army of mutilated soldiers and born weapons; A family of royals, hiding their secrets; A traitor burrowed deep within the city; A joking general, leading the onslaught; One who stands in the middle of it all...
This is their story.
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Hoooo-boy! Thats some sweet story! I find it a bit uncomfortable to think about the scars
, but overall it's great. Can't wait to see more!
Really good read! Keep it up, hope to see more.
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thanks, don't worry i'm working on the third chapter
I just want to say great job! The world you've built is amazing and flawed, as are these portrayals of the Main Six. I felt real anxiety for Rainbow Dash struggling to pass her trial of strength and Rarity on learning some horrible truths about the literally parasitic activities that kept the upper class unicorns at the top of their hierarchy. You have a few typos in the last chapter (like Twilight's surrogate parent being referred to as both Helping Hooves and Helping Hand), but the mistakes are very minor and in general the writing style is wonderfully descriptive without being purple.
Truly excellent work! I'm baffled by why you have so few views and comments, but rest assured that this reader, at least, is appreciative and can't wait for more!
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Thank you for the time you spent replying, it means a lot to me and my editor (well i think it does). I also appreciate the heads up on the Hands-Hooves issue. I had thought I gathered all of those, but goes to show what working at 2am will do to someone's brain haha. It's always nice to get feedback like yours and I hope to keep entertaining you.
P.S I don't care much about the views, I just love writing it and as long as one person enjoys it, I'm happy as a clam.
517209 As the Editor for this story, I will say that it does in fact mean a lot to me! I know I don't do much in the way of the story, but I'm glad to be a part of it. Thanks for the compliments on behalf of tilpin313 and myself, and I hope the next chapter will please you just as much as the last few have.
PS: Gosh darn typos, they get everywhere.