This is my first story that I've deemed good enough to post (that's right, I have standards). The story follows Silver, the Prince an future King of the Changeling Hive, who was born with a human soul. At age 15, the same age his human counterpart died, he starts to get flashes of pain an visions of the human world, a product of regaining his old memories. So, as any character in a story would, he decides to set off into Equestria to figure out what a human is. He has never left the hive before, subsequently, he knows absolutely nothing about the real world (other than descriptions told to him by other changelings).
P.S. Wow, I found a picture of a silver changeling. I don't have a devianart, so I couldn't exactly ask for permission, but check out http://lizzytheviking.deviantart.com/ Lizzy the Viking, some pretty sick pictures (she's got Chell in pony mode, need I say more). If anyone knows she would have a problem with me using the picture, tell me and I'll take it down and look for another.
Let's see if le standards are as high as mine
What I liked
-The 9,000 words alone tell me that you've taken the time to put work into your first story. That's exceptional compared to the readers that feel okay with 300 word chapters so that's a thumbs up for me.
-Your grammar and your spelling are good. I'm sure that there are a few spots that need touching up, but its checked out okay.
-You've made a slight mary sue, but you're trying to make a believable one and I appreciate it.
what I disliked
-Royals don't say things like fuck off. Try and make them sound more formal. Instead of "fuck off' try "take your leave." or "get out of my sight" . I want to read about a changeling prince with changeling prince dialogue, not a prince with the dialogue of a teenager.
-Your character still is kind of a mary sue.
-I don't really understand the whole point of introducing the character as a human in the first place. It was kind of......Nonsensical.
Jesus Christ man, learn to write a description. The short desc is too much parenthesis, and this one just keeps going
2815896 I've seen longer make it to the featured list. Is it really a big deal?
2815913 it's annoying, especially on a phone, to scroll all the way through that (I have OCD, so my mind keeps telling me that there might be something crucial at the end)
2815942YEAH!? YEAH!? WELL YOUR UPSIDE DOWN AVATAR MAKES ME A LITTLE DIZZY EVERYTIME I SEE IT!
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WELL I LIKE CHEESE AND BISCUITS, SO WHAT!?
2815967 I like eggs with toast. It's quite delectable. Also le new author needs a few critiques so you should probably comment on le story and not delicious foods.
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2815978 why not?
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2815990 so where is the kebab?
2815947 I'll have you know a friend of mine asked me to do that. Why he asked, I have no idea.
2815967 I like gravy with my toast, preferably white gravy.
2816003 Crazy kids
Look at this author trying to get me to desperately read his fic. Teh lolz. Anyways, nice job as you certainly made this interesting to say the least. Although at this point... why does being a human have anything to do with the story, besides it being the driving plot device? I mean couldn't this had been a better story by it just being the queen trying to find a magical way to fuck the whatever over because she is evil only to find out about hummility and eventually accept who she is, or would that be too obvious?
i actually liked this
... i love the funny way silver relates with things in the outside world with gore and such 
i enjoyed this chapter very much and look forward to more
your gonna make more right? if not i might have to stick a few of those *Demons* under your pillow
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I'll comment on all the delicious foods I want to. Fish fingers and custard, pears, liverwurst, cum, home made popcorn. fresh cheese pizza....I'm blanking at the moment.
2816422 Oh Oh my turn! Pizza, spaghetti, tea with a few drops of
cumsugar, pancakes, tacos, and nachos covered incumcheeseFEATURED WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW
Congrats new guy 
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The goatsnake burger from Kumas Korner....
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2816506 melbournepizzadelivery.com.au/wp-content/uploads/2009/12/Worlds-Largest-Pizza.jpg Two of these and an order of hot wings
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Oh yeah, that would be an awesome midafternoon snack.
I can't really add anything that hasn't been noted in the comments already. It's an excellent first story.
I should suggest that you revise your description so it's less meta. The description, or at least the first part of it, should be solely about the plot of the story. Readers will find it less distracting and more to the point.
Ok, first of all. Holy crap, people read this, and liked it?! Thanks to anyone who did read it, even if you didn't like it, although, I should probably apologize in that case...
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Wow, thanks, that's actually really helpful (the human thing does actually relate to the story, it's just that,well, I wrote this chapter with a LOT of stuff planned in the future). And even though I have a bunch thought out in my head for the later parts of the story, this was the product of 48 hours with no sleep, so yeah... excuses. Also I ramble when I talk to people over text. The Mary Sue, thanks for pointing that out. I'm going to do my best to get rid of that.
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Eh, as you can see from ^That wall of text, I ramble.
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I leik cheez n biscuis two!
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...wut?
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Not a bad idea, like I said though, in the grand scheme of things, it comes around.
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HOLY SHIT! Someone who wants another chapter?! Hell yeah! And don't worry, I've already written the first word of the second chapter!
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WAIT WHAT THE FUCK!? This was featured?! Wow, thanks again to everyone who read and told me how I fucked up!
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Yeah, it was about my 49th hour of waking when I wrote the description, and I had to completely revise it because the mods said no swearing. But yeah, looking at it now I probably wouldn't click that monstrosity of a description.
Once again thanks to everyone who read and commented. Even though thanks to you guys (speciifically fiddlesticks) I have to write another, freakin', chapter. But in all seriousness, I need to learn to shut up. Thanks!
2817430 It's still being featured. Haven't you seen it in the list yet?
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EEEHEEEEEEEEEEH! To the homepage I go!
14 thumbs up and only one thumb down so far
that should tell you something right there
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Thanks so much man, woman, pony, whatevertheheckyouare. It really does mean a lot.
2817589 your welcome
cant wait till silver meets a certain human obsessed pony that resides in ponyville
oh the trouble that will ensue... i just cant wait
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2817430 I actually didn't read it,
the in your face short desc got me here on my phone, and I just did a little bit of nit picking.
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Oh, okay. Thanks.
I like this so far. and yes, for the most part, I am sane.
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Hahah sweet, god, this is so awesome, I leave and come back and more people read it and commented. Never expected this much positive feedback. And you sure?
2818375 I question my sanity at times, but yeah, I'm good for now. would you mind checking out my story?
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But yeah, I'll definitely check it out. We new guys gotta stick together, eh?
Though I'm not a fan of self promotion, I don't see why not, I'll just OH GOD SO MANY CHAPTERS! Haha, yeah. I'll read it in a bit, I'm in the middle of writing the next chapter for this. Haha I expected just a few chapters, then BAM, like, 26.
2819235 yeah. sorry bout that, I just like to keep my chapters short, around 1,000 words. but thanks, I always enjoy seeing what others think.
2817986 your welcome, I may read it later though
I'm totally not stalking this story...
naaahhh that would be weird and freaky
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Hahah, it's okay, I don't mind. Next chapter is in the works, I'm about 4,000 words in.
Sweeeeet!!!!!!
New Chapter
its 4 AM you say? Who Cares
Sleep is for the weak
And then there was a killing spree
i just hope its soon cause there wont be anypony left if he keeps this up
will make for great drama when he finally regains his *humanity* and realize what a monster he truly is
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Yeah, he... Likes to burn things... A lot.
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4 A.M.? It was only 1-ish where I was. I think. Now that I think about it, I don't actually remember. And Kill it with fire? You say? I guess I have to give you credit for the rest of the story then.
2842865 it was around 4 Am for me when i had seen this story update
confound all these time differences 
Holy crap 4000 words total. I was going to put this in the authors notes, but that was too weird to mess up. Don't make me change anything!
NEW CHAPTER!!!!!!!
*ahem* im ok now
oh snap. silver dun met one o dem farmin ponys
that last scene
would be interesting to see what her reaction is when she wakes up XD
and yes... im stalking you and this story
But in a good not so creepy way
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Haha, you know, it really does mean a lot to me that you continue to support me and this story. I honestly look forward to your reactions and comment a lot more than you would think. Aaaaand now I look like I have womanly feelings, so, something manly. BOOBS.
2871943 Omg here quick
heres some manlyness to counter the 'Feels'
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BEER, GUNS, AN 'MURICA! Thanks dude, I feel better than a pig in a pie eatin' contest right now!
^(me having no idea how to act manly, especially through a line of text)