What happens when a Changeling and a Bat-pony have foals? A Batling. Not even the princess of the sun knows what these hybrid creatures are. When Luna explains them to Celestia, the solar god wants to know more. Aldatu, a Batling, just wants to escape. With Celestia missing, and a Batling on the run, chaos arises in the kingdom of Equestria.
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Chapters (2)
I haven't read this story, but by her past record of stories, I can't wait to!
Oohkay, keepin' an eye on this one as well.
indy
This is my new favourite crossbreed...
Wait a second, don't changelings lay eggs?
3541274
If the mother os a Changeling, it will be an egg. If the father is a changeling, it won't be an egg. :)
3541674
Strange, I thought changelings would be too biologically different to reproduce.
And there is still that possibility they are all children of the queen...
3542529
Some follow the Queen, some follow Luna. Some even follow both.
3542554
Makes sense.
I'm afraid I won't read it because of the sex tag, but I wish you luck!
wtf
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WTB?
the constant jumps really don't serve the story. the first chapter seemed to have a jump every few seconds. you don't really need to have every single bit of passage in time go by instantly, it just breaks the flow. I see in this chapter the conversations last for about maybe a minute at most and then there's another jump in time. it also doesn't help that it seems like the jumps take place only a few seconds after the end of whatever was going on before the jump. this makes your story go by too quickly and seem somewhat uncompleted. if I didn't know any better I'd say you just cut out the parts you didn't want to write by having a time skip.
allow me to point out moments when the time jumps were not needed.
right at the beginning of chapter one. you describe her position and then time skip. after that, you have a character harass the main one by calling her a nickname she says she hates, and then describe the main character's armor, then time jump. after that, you time jump after strong takes out the key. then you time jump for practically no reason after aldatu takes down strong. after that, its over.
it also makes it confusing. one second celestia's talking about how bad it is that somepony was described as "heartless" then you jump to the end of the day.
you aren't being descriptive either. you barely sum up the characteristics of a character and then move on. you simply told us aldatu found her way out. why not write to describe to us as she finds her way out?
in the end, this has potential but I cant see it working out as its being written right now.
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*yawns as he slips into bed, thinking about if the author of the story is going to listen to him*