Pony adventurer Phoenix dreamed of becoming a Treasure Hunter since he was a filly, now that his childhood dream is fulfilled he is one of the best Treasure Hunters of all time. Now Phoenix and his trusty companions Serafina and Torch take on the biggest challenge of all........finding the fabled Village Within The Sands, but when Celestia's Royal Gaurd hears of the news they are sent to stop Phoenix and the gang from reaching the untold riches of the village. One question remains. Will this be Phoenix's last adventure?
Chapters (2)
I will be publishing a new chapter everyday
This is brilliant! You have a slight problem with run on sentences, but they're actually not that bad. That's the only thing wrong, other then a few uncapatalized I. I love your writing style. I knew it was a good idea to encourage you to write.
Thank you for helping me out with getting back into writing,i will work on the run on sentences in my next chapters.
This story feels rushed...ALOT
A young stallion (the equivalent of a boy or a teenager) is a colt, not a filly.
Thank you everybody for watching out for mistakes. I will revise my work and thanks you again